List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and has grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences simpler and more direct. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas clearly. Also, avoid redundancy and complete your sentences fully.

例: Yes, I usually make a list when I shop because it helps me remember everything I need. This way, I can shop quickly and avoid forgetting important items.

提案: Your answer is good but incomplete at the end. Try to finish your sentences and use linking words like 'first' and 'then' properly. Also, avoid repeating phrases like 'Does it work?'.

例: Yes, I always make a list for my work because it helps me prioritize tasks. First, I do the most important jobs, and then I complete the less urgent ones. This method helps me finish all my work efficiently.

提案: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and unclear phrases. Try to use correct sentence structures and explain your ideas more clearly. Use linking words like 'because' and 'but' properly.

例: Some people don't like making lists because they trust their memory or think it is unnecessary. However, I believe making lists is helpful because it makes tasks easier to manage.

提案: Your answer is good but incomplete at the end. Try to finish your sentences and avoid vague words like 'stuff'. Use specific vocabulary and linking words to make your answer clear and complete.

例: I prefer to make lists on my phone because it is easy to carry and update. I can add or remove items anytime, which is more convenient than using paper lists.

× I personally feel making this stuff shopping makes us easier and convenient to shop without any workload or pressure.

✓ I personally feel that making a shopping list makes it easier and more convenient for us to shop without any workload or pressure.

The phrase 'making this stuff shopping' is incorrect. The correct form is 'making a shopping list' or 'making a list for shopping'. Also, 'makes us easier' should be 'makes it easier for us' to correctly express the idea. The verb 'making' should be followed by a noun phrase to indicate the action clearly.

× It also helps to manage our time and it helps to buy all the things I.

✓ It also helps to manage our time and helps me buy all the things I need.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'all the things I' which is incomplete. It should be completed to express the intended meaning, such as 'all the things I need'. Also, 'helps to buy' is better expressed as 'helps me buy' to indicate the subject performing the action.

× If I have a busy day, I make a list of work according to its importance and I first perform the work of more importance and then less importance.

✓ If I have a busy day, I make a list of work according to its importance and first perform the more important tasks, then the less important ones.

The phrase 'perform the work of more importance and then less importance' is awkward. It is better to say 'perform the more important tasks, then the less important ones' for clarity and natural expression.

× That's how I can perform all my work without.

✓ That's how I can complete all my work without any issues.

The sentence is incomplete ending with 'without'. It needs an object or phrase to complete the meaning, such as 'without any issues' or 'without stress'.

× I think some people don't like making list probably because their memory is good or they think it is unnecessary or extra.

✓ I think some people don't like making lists probably because their memory is good or they think it is unnecessary or extra.

The word 'list' should be plural 'lists' because it refers to the general action of making multiple lists, not just one.

× But I personally believe this is a wrong attitude because it has to make our works easier.

✓ But I personally believe this is a wrong attitude because it helps make our work easier.

The phrase 'it has to make our works easier' is incorrect. 'It helps make our work easier' is the correct expression. Also, 'works' should be singular 'work' when referring to tasks in general.

× I usually prefer to make a list on my phone rather than on paper because we can carry our phone everywhere we go without any inconvenience.

✓ I usually prefer to make a list on my phone rather than on paper because we can carry our phone everywhere we go without any inconvenience.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No correction needed.

× We can easily add or remove any stuff that we need to buy from our list, and it is more convenient than.

✓ We can easily add or remove any items that we need to buy from our list, and it is more convenient than paper lists.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'more convenient than'. It needs a comparison object to complete the meaning, such as 'more convenient than paper lists'. Also, 'stuff' is informal; 'items' is more appropriate here.