List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了观点，但句子结构不够清晰，存在语法错误，且表达不够自然。建议简化句子结构，直接回答问题，并用连词连接细节，使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, I usually make a shopping list because it helps me plan my purchases. This way, I can spend money more reasonably and buy exactly what I need.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰，逻辑混乱。建议使用简单句直接回答问题，并用连词连接原因，表达更明确。

例: It depends. If I can't predict my tasks, making a list might not help much. However, when I can foresee my work, making a list usually helps me plan better.

提案: 回答中有重复和不完整的句子，表达不够连贯。建议用更简洁的句子表达观点，并用连词连接理由，使内容更具体。

例: Some people don't like making lists because they have good memories and can remember their tasks. However, for those who struggle to remember, making lists can help them stay organized.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和重复，表达不够自然。建议简化句子，避免重复，使用正确的比较结构，使表达更流畅。

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it saves time and is more convenient. Also, paper lists can be lost easily, so using my phone is better for me.

× Well, certainly initially making the list it means making plan or making plans is a very good habit.

✓ Well, certainly initially making the list means making a plan or making plans is a very good habit.

这里缺少冠词“a”，在英语中，单数可数名词前需要加冠词。应为“making a plan”而不是“making plan”。

× So it could let your spending more reasonable and could buy things where would you want.

✓ So it could make your spending more reasonable and you could buy things where you want.

动词搭配错误，应使用“make your spending more reasonable”而不是“let your spending more reasonable”。此外，“where would you want”语序错误，应为“where you want”。

× If there's most of the things that I could not predicted making a list may not really make make make it.

✓ If there are most of the things that I could not predict, making a list may not really work.

“there's”是“there is”的缩写，不能用于复数名词“most of the things”，应改为“there are”。“predicted”应为动词原形“predict”因为前面有情态动词“could”。

× So when the future is more predict when I'm making a list, it can mostly it could bring me more better future.

✓ So when the future is more predictable when I'm making a list, it can mostly bring me a better future.

“predict”是动词，需用形容词“predictable”来修饰“future”。“more better”是错误的比较级表达，应为“a better future”。

× Well, maybe they have very good brains.

✓ Well, maybe they have very good memory.

“brains”在这里用法不当，通常说“have a good memory”表示记忆力好，更符合语境。

× Well, this may not a very bad habit.

✓ Well, this may not be a very bad habit.

句子缺少系动词“be”，完整结构应为“may not be a very bad habit”。

× But when people don't have this, don't have this capacity, they will they?

✓ But when people don't have this capacity, they will, I think making a list is better for them to improve themselves.

句子结构混乱，重复“don't have this”，且“they will they?”不完整，应删除多余部分并调整句子使其通顺。

× I I may prefer on my phone because when I download it, it can reduce my time consuming so it's more better than making a list on paper.

✓ I may prefer using my phone because when I download it, it can reduce my time consumption so it's better than making a list on paper.

“prefer on my phone”应改为“prefer using my phone”。“time consuming”是形容词，名词应为“time consumption”。“more better”错误，比较级用“better”。

× Secondly, when writing on paper, the paper may maybe get lost so making this in the phone is more better for me.

✓ Secondly, when writing on paper, the paper may get lost so making this on the phone is better for me.

“may maybe”重复，应去掉一个。“more better”错误，比较级用“better”。“in the phone”应为“on the phone”。