List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and concise. Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide specific examples to enrich your response.

例: Yes, I always make a shopping list because it helps me remember important items. For instance, last week I forgot to buy milk, which made me feel anxious since my family needed it. Therefore, having a list prevents such situations and keeps me organised.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but could be clearer and more structured. Use linking words to show sequence and avoid repetition. Also, use more precise vocabulary to explain how the list helps you.

例: Yes, I usually write a list on paper to organise my tasks. Once I complete a task, I tick it off, which motivates me to focus on the next one. This method helps me stay productive and manage my work efficiently.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and repetitive. Try to express your ideas more clearly and logically. Use linking words to connect your points and provide specific reasons or examples to support your opinion.

例: Some people dislike making lists because they prefer to live spontaneously without feeling pressured. For example, they might find lists stressful as they feel obliged to complete tasks in order, which can cause anxiety if they fall behind.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more concise and natural. Avoid repeating the same idea and use linking words to improve coherence. Also, explain why paper is better than phone with specific reasons.

例: I prefer making lists on paper because it allows me to physically tick off completed tasks, which feels satisfying. Additionally, paper lists are easier to access without distractions compared to using a phone.

× I always prepare a shopping list because when I go outside for shopping that time I I forgot some important things.

✓ I always prepare a shopping list because when I go outside for shopping, I forget some important things.

The sentence incorrectly uses the past tense 'forgot' when describing a habitual action. Since the action is habitual, the present tense 'forget' should be used to maintain tense consistency.

× That time I feel anxious because my family wants that things and I forgot that.

✓ At that time, I feel anxious because my family wants those things and I forget them.

The pronouns 'that things' and 'that' are incorrect. 'Those things' is the correct plural demonstrative pronoun, and 'them' should be used as the object pronoun referring back to 'things'. Also, 'forgot' should be 'forget' to maintain present tense consistency.

× I feel embarrassed and shame.

✓ I feel embarrassed and ashamed.

'Shame' is a noun, but the sentence requires an adjective to describe the feeling. The correct adjective is 'ashamed'.

× Yes, I make a list for my work on paper because I want to know what's the task I I wanna do.

✓ Yes, I make a list for my work on paper because I want to know what tasks I want to do.

The phrase 'what's the task' is incorrect; it should be 'what tasks' to refer to multiple tasks. Also, 'wanna' is informal and should be replaced with 'want to' in formal speech.

× When I complete my first task after that I click on that paper.

✓ When I complete my first task, I tick it off on the paper.

The phrase 'click on that paper' is incorrect in this context. The correct expression is 'tick it off' to indicate marking a task as done.

× After that I move on the another task that it's beneficial for me.

✓ After that, I move on to another task that is beneficial for me.

The preposition 'on' should be followed by 'to' in the phrase 'move on to another task'. Also, 'the another' is incorrect; it should be 'another' without 'the'.

× because when somebody considered on the work and that time they don't they can't do any task, that time they feel stressed and anxious because they think it's why I can't do it and after that.

✓ because when somebody is focused on the work, they can't do any task; at that time, they feel stressed and anxious because they think, 'Why can't I do it?'

The phrase 'considered on the work' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'focused on the work'. Also, the sentence structure is confusing and needs clarification for better understanding.

× I usually want to make a list on paper because it helps me a lot because it helps me keep track of the task I need to complete.

✓ I usually like to make a list on paper because it helps me a lot and helps me keep track of the tasks I need to complete.

The phrase 'want to make a list on paper' is better expressed as 'like to make a list on paper' to indicate preference. Also, 'the task' should be plural 'the tasks' to match the context.

× Once I finish the task it I tick it off on the list.

✓ Once I finish a task, I tick it off on the list.

The phrase 'the task it' is redundant and incorrect. It should be 'a task' to generalize and avoid repetition.

× After that I move on the further task.

✓ After that, I move on to the next task.

The phrase 'move on the further task' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'move on to the next task' to indicate progression.

× So I think so it's a very beneficial for me to make a list on paper rather than phone.

✓ So I think it is very beneficial for me to make a list on paper rather than on my phone.

The phrase 'So I think so' is redundant; 'So I think' suffices. Also, 'a very beneficial' is incorrect; 'very beneficial' is an adjective phrase and does not need 'a'. Additionally, 'rather than phone' should be 'rather than on my phone' for clarity and correctness.