List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit repetitive and unclear. Try to give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. For example, you can say you try to make a list especially for grocery shopping to avoid forgetting items.

例: Yes, I usually make a list when I go shopping, especially for groceries. This helps me remember what I need and avoid buying unnecessary things. For instance, I list items I have at home and those I need to buy. It saves time and money.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and is somewhat confusing. Try to give a direct response first, then explain with clear reasons using linking words. Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Keep your answer structured and concise.

例: I sometimes make lists for my work, but not always. When I do, it helps me track my progress and stay organized. However, since I am not very organized, I don't always follow the list strictly.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains unnecessary repetition and incomplete thoughts. Try to give a clear opinion and support it with reasons using linking words. Avoid self-correction during the answer and keep it concise.

例: Some people dislike making lists because they find it time-consuming or prefer to remember tasks mentally. For example, hardworking people may not need lists as they keep everything in their mind.

提案: Your answer is generally clear but a bit long and contains some grammar mistakes. Try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep sentences concise. Also, check verb tenses and sentence structure for accuracy.

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it is always with me. I used to have a diary as a child, but now using my phone is more convenient. This way, I can quickly add or check items whenever I need.

× Especially when I'm going for grocery sto shopping.

✓ Especially when I'm going grocery shopping.

The phrase 'going grocery shopping' is a fixed expression where 'grocery' acts as an adjective and 'shopping' is a gerund. The incorrect insertion of 'sto' is a typographical error and should be removed for correct usage.

× I try to make a list which items I need and which items I don't need, which are left, which are where are the leftovers and because.

✓ I try to make a list of which items I need and which items I don't need, which are left, and where the leftovers are.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains redundant and misplaced phrases. Using 'a list of which items' is correct, and the sentence should be structured clearly without unnecessary conjunctions like 'and because' at the end.

× I tried to make a list for my work, but I'm telling you the truth.

✓ I try to make a list for my work, but I'm telling you the truth.

The question is about habitual action, so present tense 'try' is appropriate instead of past tense 'tried'. Mixing past tense with present continuous 'I'm telling' causes inconsistency.

× It works sometimes or sometimes it does sometimes it doesn't work because at first I told you that I'm not an organized person at all.

✓ It works sometimes, but sometimes it doesn't because, as I told you before, I'm not an organized person at all.

The sentence is repetitive and lacks proper conjunctions. Using 'but' to contrast and restructuring the sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× But when I make a list of my work, it helps me to track down my, you know, progresses.

✓ But when I make a list of my work, it helps me to track my progress.

'Progress' is an uncountable noun and does not have a plural form. Using 'progresses' is incorrect. Also, 'track down' is unnecessary; 'track' suffices.

× People who are lazy do not make lists at all. But the hardworking people also sometimes do not make lists because they have everything in their mind.

✓ People who are lazy do not make lists at all. But hardworking people sometimes also do not make lists because they have everything in their minds.

The phrase 'in their mind' should be plural 'in their minds' to agree with plural subject 'people'. Also, 'the hardworking people' can be simplified to 'hardworking people' for naturalness.

× But people like me who are not at not at all lazy or not so much, you know, hardworking.

✓ But people like me who are not at all lazy or very hardworking.

The original sentence is fragmented and repetitive ('not at not at all'). It should be concise and clear without repeated phrases.

× Yeah, I had a diary when I were a little, but now when I am making a list, I try to keep that on my phone because you know, phone is always with me and whenever I am forgetting something or I can't remember.

✓ Yeah, I had a diary when I was little, but now when I make a list, I try to keep it on my phone because, you know, my phone is always with me and whenever I forget something or can't remember.

The correct past tense of 'to be' with 'I' is 'was', not 'were'. Also, 'when I am making' should be 'when I make' for habitual action. 'I am forgetting' is incorrect; simple present 'I forget' is appropriate. 'That' should be 'it' referring to the list. 'Phone' needs a possessive pronoun 'my'.