List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在重复和语法错误，表达不够自然。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并且更直接回答问题。

例: I usually don't make a shopping list because I often go shopping spontaneously with my mom. I just buy what I feel like at the moment.

提案: 回答较为冗长且语法不够准确。建议使用更清晰的句子结构，并用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: Yes, I make a list for my work because it helps me organize my tasks. By following the list step by step, I can clearly see what I need to do next, which is very helpful.

提案: 表达不够清晰，语法错误较多，逻辑连接不够紧密。建议简化表达，使用更准确的词汇和连接词。

例: Some people dislike making lists because it feels tiring to plan everything. They prefer to be spontaneous rather than follow strict lists all the time.

提案: 回答内容较好，但有语法和表达不够准确的问题。建议注意句子完整性和用词准确性。

例: I prefer to make lists on my phone because I can access them anywhere. Also, I can easily check off items when I finish them, which is very convenient.

× So for me I will not make a list when I'm shopping because I I go to supermarket or go to a shopping place with my mom randomly when she is really happy she will Take Me Out.

✓ So for me, I will not make a list when I'm shopping because I go to the supermarket or go to a shopping place with my mom randomly. When she is really happy, she will take me out.

句子中缺少逗号导致句子结构混乱，且“Take Me Out”中的大写字母不符合英语书写规范，应改为小写。建议在复合句中使用逗号分隔不同的分句，使句子更清晰易懂。

× So for me I will not make a list when I'm shopping because I I go to supermarket or go to a shopping place with my mom randomly when she is really happy she will Take Me Out.

✓ So for me, I will not make a list when I'm shopping because I go to the supermarket or go to a shopping place with my mom randomly. When she is really happy, she will take me out.

英语中“supermarket”前需要加定冠词“the”，表示特指某个超市。缺少冠词会导致表达不准确。

× So I don't actually make a list and I just buy what I want at that.

✓ So I don't actually make a list and I just buy what I want at that time.

“at that”不完整，缺少名词“time”来完成短语，表达时间点。

× Yes, I do make a list for my work because you know, make a list will help me to study and when I make a list step by step and it's really good for me to know all what I need to do next and it is really helpful.

✓ Yes, I do make a list for my work because, you know, making a list will help me to study. When I make a list step by step, it's really good for me to know everything I need to do next, and it is really helpful.

“make a list”作为主语时应使用动名词形式“making a list”。此外，句子缺少逗号，导致结构不清晰。

× Yes, I do make a list for my work because you know, make a list will help me to study and when I make a list step by step and it's really good for me to know all what I need to do next and it is really helpful.

✓ Yes, I do make a list for my work because, you know, making a list will help me to study. When I make a list step by step, it's really good for me to know everything I need to do next, and it is really helpful.

“all what I need to do next”中“all”用法不当，应改为“everything”更符合表达习惯。

× So as what I said before, I don't like make a list of shopping because it's really random when I'm shopping what I want to buy.

✓ So as I said before, I don't like to make a shopping list because it's really random what I want to buy when I'm shopping.

“make a list of shopping”表达不自然，应改为“make a shopping list”。此外，“as what I said before”应简化为“as I said before”。

× So as what I said before, I don't like make a list of shopping because it's really random when I'm shopping what I want to buy.

✓ So as I said before, I don't like to make a shopping list because it's really random what I want to buy when I'm shopping.

“like make”应改为“like to make”，动词“like”后接不定式更合适。

× So I think that people might just like me because we are tired to make a list in our whole life.

✓ So I think that people might be just like me because we are tired of making lists our whole life.

“tired to make a list”表达错误，应为“tired of making lists”。此外，“in our whole life”应改为“our whole life”或“throughout our whole life”。

× So I think that people might just like me because we are tired to make a list in our whole life.

✓ So I think that people might be just like me because we are tired of making lists our whole life.

“tired”后应接介词“of”加动名词形式，表示“厌倦做某事”。

× If we all need to make a list for everything, it's really tired to do it do this.

✓ If we all need to make a list for everything, it's really tiring to do this.

“really tired”用法错误，应为“really tiring”，因为这里形容的是动作使人感到疲惫。

× If we all need to make a list for everything, it's really tired to do it do this.

✓ If we all need to make a list for everything, it's really tiring to do this.

“do it do this”重复且不正确，应简化为“do this”。

× So I prefer to make a list on my phone because when you make a list on your you can take out and everywhere you want to use the list.

✓ So I prefer to make a list on my phone because when you make a list on your phone, you can take it out everywhere you want to use the list.

“on your”后缺少名词“phone”，且“take out”应为“take it out”，需要宾语。

× And if when you are finished one one thing in your list, you can click it and it's really helpful then.

✓ And if you finish one thing on your list, you can click it, and it's really helpful.

“finished one one thing”重复且用词不当，应为“finish one thing”。“in your list”应改为“on your list”。