List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like "go around and buy exactly what I want" and "not just going around doing nothing." Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I always make a shopping list because it helps me save time and avoid buying unnecessary items. This way, I can shop efficiently and stick to what I really need.

提案: Your answer is brief and lacks clarity. Try to respond directly with a topic sentence and add specific supporting details. Also, correct grammar mistakes such as "either is" to "whether it's."

例: Yes, I usually make lists for my daily tasks and future projects. This helps me stay organized and ensures I don't forget important responsibilities.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and could be more specific. Explain reasons why some people dislike making lists, and use linking words to improve coherence. Avoid vague phrases like "habit of everyday work."

例: Some people dislike making lists because they find it time-consuming or prefer to keep things flexible. Additionally, they might feel that lists limit their spontaneity.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but try to avoid filler words like "Uh" and be more concise. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I prefer making lists on paper because using my phone often distracts me with apps and games, which makes it harder to focus.

× Making a list when I go to shopping helps me save time and effort.

✓ Making a list when I go shopping helps me save time and effort.

The phrase 'go to shopping' is incorrect because 'go' is followed directly by the verb in -ing form without 'to'. The correct form is 'go shopping'.

× I usually make a list for my work, either is everyday work or future plans.

✓ I usually make a list for my work, whether it is everyday work or future plans.

The phrase 'either is everyday work or future plans' is incorrect. 'Either' should be followed by 'or' with parallel structure, and 'whether' is more appropriate here to express alternatives. Also, 'is' needs a subject, so 'it is' is correct.

× It is because making a list is actually a habit of everyday work.

✓ It is because making a list is actually a habit for everyday work.

The preposition 'of' is incorrectly used here. The correct preposition is 'for' to indicate purpose or relation to 'everyday work'.

× Usually they just go to sleep at the end of the day, but people spend time making a list for a better tomorrow.

✓ Usually, they just go to sleep at the end of the day, but some people spend time making a list for a better tomorrow.

The pronoun 'people' is too general and contrasts with 'they' in the previous clause. Adding 'some' clarifies the contrast between groups of people.

× I prefer making a list on my notebook on paper.

✓ I prefer to make a list in my notebook on paper.

After 'prefer', both the gerund and infinitive can be used, but 'prefer to make' is more common and natural here. Also, 'in my notebook' is more appropriate than 'on my notebook' because you write inside a notebook.

× I prefer making a list on my notebook on paper.

✓ I prefer to make a list in my notebook on paper.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect when referring to a notebook; 'in' is used because the list is written inside the notebook.

× Uh, because if I use the phone I might get distracted by the apps, application and games so I could not focus.

✓ Uh, because if I use the phone I might get distracted by the apps, applications, and games so I cannot focus.

The modal verb 'could not' is incorrect here because the sentence refers to a present possibility. 'Cannot' is the correct modal verb to express inability in the present. Also, 'application' should be plural 'applications' to match 'apps' and 'games'.