List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use correct verb tenses and sentence structures to make your answer clearer and more natural. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. For example, say 'I usually go shopping with my mother, so I don't make a list because she supervises the shopping.'

例: I usually go shopping with my mother, so I don't make a list because she supervises the shopping. This way, I don't have to worry about forgetting anything, and it makes the process easier for me.

提案: Focus on clear sentence construction and avoid unclear phrases like 'with inner like it within my.' Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, say 'I don't make lists for work because I have a good memory, and I usually manage to complete all my tasks on time.'

例: I don't make lists for work because I have a good memory, and I usually manage to complete all my tasks on time. Therefore, I find lists unnecessary for me.

提案: Improve grammar and sentence clarity. Use linking words to explain your reasons logically. For example, say 'Personally, making lists stresses me out because I see all the tasks I have to do, and if I can't finish some, I feel panicked.'

例: Personally, making lists stresses me out because I see all the tasks I have to do, and if I can't finish some, I feel panicked. So, I prefer not to make lists to avoid this pressure.

提案: Complete your sentences and avoid unfinished thoughts. Use clear linking words and explain your preference fully. For example, say 'I prefer making lists on paper because it feels easier and more natural for me, although sometimes I use my phone.'

例: I prefer making lists on paper because it feels easier and more natural for me, although sometimes I use my phone when it's more convenient.

× I went to shopping always with my mother, so I don't have that much responsibility when it comes to shopping because I am my mother's and my mother supervision.

✓ I always went shopping with my mother, so I don't have that much responsibility when it comes to shopping because I am under my mother's supervision.

The phrase 'went to shopping' is incorrect; 'went shopping' is the correct past tense form. Also, 'I am my mother's and my mother supervision' is incorrect; it should be 'I am under my mother's supervision' to express being supervised by her.

× I am my mother's and my mother supervision.

✓ I am under my mother's supervision.

The phrase lacks the preposition 'under' which is necessary to indicate being supervised by someone. Without 'under', the sentence is unclear and grammatically incorrect.

× I don't have that much responsibility when it comes to shopping

✓ I don't have much responsibility when it comes to shopping

The phrase 'that much' is less appropriate here; 'much' is sufficient and more natural when referring to uncountable nouns like 'responsibility' in negative sentences.

× I forgot things very rarely, so I don't need the lift, so I don't make a list.

✓ I forget things very rarely, so I don't need the list, so I don't make a list.

'Forgot' is past tense, but the context requires present tense 'forget'. Also, 'lift' is incorrect; it should be 'list'. The pronoun 'the' is needed before 'list' to specify it.

× But somehow I managed to do all the things I have to do with inner like it within my.

✓ But somehow I manage to do all the things I have to do without a list.

The sentence is unclear and contains incorrect words like 'inner like it within my'. The intended meaning is likely managing tasks without a list. 'Manage' should be present tense to match 'I have to do'.

× For me personally, when I make list it makes me more stressed out because that I am seeing what I have to do and even like within that time.

✓ For me personally, when I make a list it makes me more stressed out because I see what I have to do even within that time.

The phrase 'make list' is missing the article 'a'. Also, 'because that I am seeing' is awkward; 'because I see' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× If I cannot finish a few tasks I'm get panicked so I don't make the.

✓ If I cannot finish a few tasks, I get panicked, so I don't make the list.

'I'm get panicked' is incorrect; it should be 'I get panicked'. Also, the sentence ends abruptly; adding 'list' completes the thought.

× Sometimes if I am alone with shopping or something I make a list in a paper which is quite easy for me and I'm still old school that's why I am using paper and sometimes when it when I make it in the phone or something I feel.

✓ Sometimes if I am alone shopping or something, I make a list on paper which is quite easy for me. I'm still old school; that's why I use paper. Sometimes when I make it on the phone or something, I feel...

The phrase 'alone with shopping' is incorrect; 'alone shopping' is better. Also, 'make a list in a paper' should be 'make a list on paper'. 'Make it in the phone' should be 'make it on the phone'. These prepositions are standard collocations in English.