List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors, which affects naturalness and effectiveness. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, correct grammar and use specific details to enrich your answer.

例: I usually don't make a shopping list because I prefer to call my mom and ask what groceries we need at home. This way, I can get precise instructions and avoid buying unnecessary items.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be improved by linking ideas more smoothly and providing more specific reasons. Use linking words to connect sentences and explain why you prefer to follow schedules rather than making your own lists.

例: I don't make lists for my work because I receive schedules from my team, which I follow closely. Therefore, I find it unnecessary to create additional plans, and I prefer to go with the flow.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence due to incomplete sentences and unclear expressions. Try to organize your ideas logically using linking words and provide specific examples to support your points. Also, avoid vague phrases and improve sentence structure.

例: Some people dislike making lists because they prefer spontaneity, especially when traveling. Additionally, others may not know what to include on their lists, so they choose to act without planning.

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be more concise and natural. Avoid filler words like 'uhm' and redundant phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide a more polished response.

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it is always accessible. Whenever I need to jot down something quickly, I can easily open an app and write it down, which is very efficient thanks to modern technology.

× I don't make list when I shop, I just go there.

✓ I don't make a list when I shop, I just go there.

The noun 'list' is countable and singular here, so it requires the indefinite article 'a'. Without the article, the sentence is grammatically incorrect.

× Whenever my mom had makes me to buy a stuffed doll to buy groceries.

✓ Whenever my mom made me buy groceries, like a stuffed doll.

The verb 'had makes' is incorrect. The past tense of 'make' is 'made'. Also, 'to buy' after 'make' is incorrect; 'make' is followed by the base form of the verb without 'to'. The sentence was also unclear, so it was rephrased for clarity.

× So usually I just call on the phone and she would tell me what to pick up.

✓ So usually I just call her on the phone and she tells me what to pick up.

The phrase 'call on the phone' is incomplete; it should specify whom you call. Also, 'would tell' suggests conditional mood, but here simple present 'tells' fits better for habitual action.

× Uhm, what we need at home and I will just forward guidance.

✓ Uhm, what we need at home and I will just follow the guidance.

The phrase 'forward guidance' is incorrect here; likely the intended phrase is 'follow the guidance'. Also, the sentence is incomplete and unclear, so it was adjusted for clarity.

× Making list it really depends on the. Concept and it.

✓ Making a list really depends on the concept and the situation.

'Making list' needs the article 'a' before 'list'. The sentence was fragmented and unclear, so it was corrected for grammatical completeness and clarity.

× If I need to make a quick notes I can just pull out my phone and make and just write down what needs to be written down.

✓ If I need to make quick notes, I can just pull out my phone and write down what needs to be written down.

'A quick notes' is incorrect because 'notes' is plural and does not take 'a'. Also, the phrase 'make and just write down' is redundant; 'write down' suffices.