List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence and avoid irrelevant or confusing statements. Use simple, correct sentences and provide a reason for your answer.

例: No, I usually don't make a list when I shop because I prefer to buy things spontaneously. However, sometimes I forget important items without a list.

提案: Your answer is somewhat relevant but lacks clarity and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to clearly state whether you make lists for work and explain why it works or not, using correct grammar and linking words.

例: Yes, I have tried making lists for my work, but it doesn't help much because I find it hard to concentrate on one task at a time due to my ADHD.

提案: Your answer is vague and grammatically incorrect. Provide a clear opinion with supporting reasons, and use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: Some people don't like making lists because they find it boring and prefer to rely on their memory instead. Also, they might feel that lists limit their flexibility.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors. Try to clearly state your preference and explain why, using complete sentences and linking words for coherence.

例: I prefer to make lists on my phone because I don't like writing by hand. Also, I always have my phone with me, so it's more convenient than carrying a notebook.

× No, 'cause I'm a lazy girl that I never make a list for you do anything.

✓ No, because I'm a lazy girl and I never make a list for anything.

The original sentence has a confusing structure and incorrect conjunction use. 'That I never make a list for you do anything' is ungrammatical. Replacing 'that' with 'and' and correcting the phrase to 'I never make a list for anything' clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× An I like to spend my money.

✓ And I like to spend my money.

The word 'An' is a misspelling of the conjunction 'And'. Correcting it to 'And' fixes the pronoun and conjunction usage.

× 4. No girls.

✓ No, I don't make lists.

The phrase '4. No girls.' is unclear and does not form a proper sentence. It seems to be a misstatement or transcription error. Replacing it with a clear response relevant to the question improves clarity and sentence structure.

× Yeah, uh, I used to try it.

✓ Yeah, uh, I used to try it.

This sentence is grammatically correct and uses the modal verb 'used to' appropriately to indicate past habit. No correction needed.

× But it doesn't work 'cause I think I might have ADHD that makes me kind a concert in one thing, like study or work.

✓ But it doesn't work because I think I might have ADHD, which makes me kind of concentrate on one thing, like studying or work.

The phrase 'kind a concert' is incorrect; it should be 'kind of concentrate'. Also, 'that makes me' should be 'which makes me' to refer to ADHD properly. 'Like study or work' should be 'like studying or work' to maintain parallel structure. These corrections fix verb form and preposition usage.

× I think it might be. They are also lazy and can focus on just something.

✓ I think it might be that they are also lazy and can't focus on just one thing.

The original sentence is fragmented and uses 'can' incorrectly; it should be 'can't' to express inability. Also, 'just something' should be 'just one thing' for clarity. Adding 'that' connects the clauses properly.

× I prefer you to. Make a list on my phone 'cause I don't like writing an I never take a book or the notebooks in my back, but I always.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my phone because I don't like writing and I never take a book or notebooks in my bag, but I always have my phone in my hands.

The phrase 'I prefer you to.' is incorrect; it should be 'I prefer to'. 'An' should be 'and'. 'Notebooks in my back' is incorrect; it should be 'notebooks in my bag'. The sentence was incomplete; adding 'have my phone in my hands' completes the thought. These corrections fix pronoun use, article use, and sentence structure.