List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more fluent and natural by combining short sentences and avoiding unnecessary pauses or question marks. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I always make a list when I go shopping because my memory isn't very reliable, and if I don't write things down beforehand, I tend to forget important items.

提案: Avoid fragmented sentences and improve coherence by linking your ideas clearly. Also, provide more specific reasons or examples to support your answer.

例: No, I don't usually make lists for my work, but I think I should because it would help me manage my tasks better and plan my day more efficiently.

提案: Make your answer more natural by using complete sentences and linking words. Also, explain your ideas with more detail or examples.

例: People have different preferences, so it's normal that some like making lists while others prefer to rely on their memory instead.

提案: Work on sentence structure and grammar to make your answer clearer. Use linking words and avoid repetition. Also, explain your reasons more specifically.

例: I prefer to make lists on my phone because it's environmentally friendly since it saves paper and trees. Plus, I always have my phone with me, so I can easily access my notes anytime.

× Yes, I do. In fact. Lists are the best way to go shopping. Because my memory is not the best.

✓ Yes, I do. In fact, lists are the best way to go shopping because my memory is not the best.

The original sentences are fragmented and incomplete. 'In fact.' and 'Because my memory is not the best.' are sentence fragments. Combining them into one sentence with proper punctuation improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× And if I go shopping without having it noted before? I will certainly forget something.

✓ If I go shopping without having it noted before, I will certainly forget something.

The original sentence incorrectly uses a question mark for a conditional statement. Conditional sentences should not end with a question mark unless they are questions. Changing the question mark to a comma corrects the sentence structure.

× No, I actually don't make a list for my work. But I should do it. I'm sure it would help a lot to improve. My task management skills. In. Would help me plan my day.

✓ No, I actually don't make a list for my work, but I should do it. I'm sure it would help a lot to improve my task management skills and would help me plan my day.

The original sentences are fragmented and have improper punctuation. 'In.' is an incomplete fragment. Combining the fragments into complete sentences with proper conjunctions and punctuation improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Different people. Have different preference.

✓ Different people have different preferences.

The noun 'preference' should be plural 'preferences' to agree with the plural subject 'different people'. Also, the period after 'Different people' creates a fragment; it should be combined into one sentence.

× So I understand that. It is normal. For some people to like lists. And other people will just try to remember it.

✓ So I understand that it is normal for some people to like lists, and other people will just try to remember them.

The original sentences are fragmented. Combining them into one or two complete sentences improves readability. Also, 'it' should be 'them' to refer correctly to 'lists' (plural).

× That's a great question. I prefer to make a list of my phone because. It is better for the world.

✓ That's a great question. I prefer to make a list on my phone because it is better for the world.

The phrase 'make a list of my phone' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on'. Also, the period after 'because' creates a fragment; it should be connected to the following clause.

× We save paper with save trees.

✓ We save paper and save trees.

The phrase 'with save trees' is incorrect. The conjunction 'and' should be used to connect two actions: 'save paper and save trees'.

× In my phone is always on my pocket so I will have my notes at. Old times.

✓ My phone is always in my pocket, so I will have my notes at all times.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and prepositions. 'In my phone is always on my pocket' is incorrect; it should be 'My phone is always in my pocket'. Also, 'at. Old times' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'at all times'.