List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 명확하지 않고 문법적 오류와 발음 문제로 인해 의사 전달이 어렵습니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 구성하며, 중복되는 표현을 피하고, 단어 선택에 주의하세요.

例: Yes, I always make a shopping list because it helps me remember what I need to buy and prevents me from forgetting items.

提案: 답변이 중간에 끊기고 문장이 완성되지 않아 의미 전달이 불분명합니다. 문장을 완성하고, 연결어를 사용해 논리적으로 답변을 구성하세요.

例: Yes, I make a list for my work because it helps me stay focused and manage my tasks efficiently.

提案: 문장이 단편적이고 연결이 부자연스러우며, 단어 선택이 부적절합니다. 문장을 완성하고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하며, 자연스러운 연결어를 사용하세요.

例: Some people dislike making lists because they find it time-consuming and feel it limits their freedom and spontaneity.

提案: 답변이 비교적 명확하지만, 문장 연결이 부자연스럽고 일부 문법 오류가 있습니다. 문장을 자연스럽게 연결하고, 비교를 명확히 표현하세요.

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it is more convenient. I always carry my phone, so I can check and update my list anytime, which is easier than using paper.

× Yes, I make a list when I shop because if I don't make a list when I shop.

✓ Yes, I make a list when I shop because if I don't, I lose track of what I need to buy.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence and lacks clarity. It repeats 'when I shop' unnecessarily and does not complete the thought properly. The correction simplifies the sentence and clarifies the cause and effect relationship.

× I lose my gore of the shopping Ann.

✓ I lose my goal of the shopping plan.

The phrase 'gore of the shopping Ann' is unclear and likely a mispronunciation or typo. It should be 'goal of the shopping plan' to make sense. The pronoun 'my' is correct but the noun phrase needs correction.

× Usually I forgot what I had to walk. Bye. Anne.

✓ Usually, I forget what I have to buy by then.

The original sentence has incorrect verb tense and prepositions. 'Forgot' should be 'forget' to match present tense, and 'walk' is incorrect; it should be 'buy'. 'Bye. Anne.' seems to be misheard or mistyped and is replaced with 'by then' to make sense.

× Because when? I don't make a list of my work. I can't concentrate. On my work however.

✓ Because when I don't make a list of my work, I can't concentrate on it.

The original sentence has unnecessary question mark and fragmented structure. The correction combines the ideas into a proper conditional sentence and removes unnecessary punctuation.

× When there is a list. I can manage my.

✓ When there is a list, I can manage my work better.

The original sentence is incomplete and fragmented. It lacks the object after 'my'. The correction completes the sentence and connects the ideas properly.

× Some people don't like making less because.

✓ Some people don't like making lists because.

The word 'less' is incorrect here; it should be 'lists' to match the context. This is a quantifier error where the wrong word form is used.

× They think it is time consuming and bit annoying.

✓ They think it is time-consuming and a bit annoying.

The original sentence misses the article 'a' before 'bit' and the compound adjective 'time-consuming' needs a hyphen. The correction fixes these errors for proper grammar.

× Making list. Can. Risk, trade, their freedom. Or spontaneity.

✓ Making lists can risk their freedom or spontaneity.

The original sentence is fragmented and has misplaced punctuation. The correction combines the sentence properly and corrects 'list' to 'lists' to match plural usage.

× I prefer to make a list on my phone because it is more convenient.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my phone because it is more convenient.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× When I go every anywhere.

✓ When I go anywhere.

The phrase 'every anywhere' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'anywhere'. This is a pronoun/adverb usage error.

× An I can manage the list everywhere.

✓ And I can manage the list everywhere.

The word 'An' is a typo and should be 'And'. This is a spelling error affecting pronoun usage.

× It is more manageable than making a list on page.

✓ It is more manageable than making a list on paper.

The word 'page' is incorrect; it should be 'paper' to refer to the material used for writing lists. This is a preposition and noun usage error.