List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like "organize the things I want to buy and not to forget them" since organizing implies remembering. Also, use correct articles and plural forms, e.g., "a little notebook" and "things." Try to keep your answer within 3-4 sentences and use linking words for coherence.

例: Yes, I usually make a list on a small notebook that I carry with me while shopping. It helps me remember what I need and stay organized, so I don't forget anything important.

提案: Your answer has several grammar and vocabulary errors that affect clarity. For example, "when I'm work" should be "when I work," and "increase my effect nerves" is unclear. Also, "note folks" should be "notebooks," and "then shoppings" should be "than shopping." Try to use linking words like "because" and "however" to connect ideas logically. Keep sentences clear and concise.

例: Yes, I always make a list when I work because it helps me stay organized and be more efficient. However, unlike shopping lists, I prefer to use larger notebooks since my job involves a lot of detailed information.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Phrases like "progress things like I do" and "There just naturally clumsy" are confusing. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use correct grammar. Also, use linking words such as "because" or "some people" to organize your answer logically. Provide specific reasons why some people avoid making lists.

例: Well, some people don't like making lists because they feel confident and remember tasks without writing them down. Others might find lists unnecessary or feel that making them takes too much time.

提案: Your answer has some grammar and word choice issues that affect clarity. For example, "what things I make lists not" should be "what kind of list I make," and "I feel further down writing on paper" is unclear. Use linking words like "if" and "but" correctly, and try to be more concise. Also, avoid mixing tenses.

例: It depends on the type of list. For work and when I'm outdoors, I prefer using my phone because it's convenient. But for personal tasks at home, I find writing on paper more comfortable.

× I do a list on little notebook that I can carry around while shopping and it helps me to organize the things I want to buy and not to forget them.

✓ I make a list in a little notebook that I can carry around while shopping, and it helps me organize the things I want to buy and not forget them.

The preposition 'on' is incorrectly used with 'list' and 'notebook'. The correct preposition is 'in' when referring to writing something inside a notebook. Also, 'do a list' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'make a list'. Additionally, 'helps me to organize' can be simplified to 'helps me organize', and 'not to forget them' should be 'not forget them' for smoother phrasing.

× I do a list on little notebook that I can carry around while shopping and it helps me to organize the things I want to buy and not to forget them.

✓ I make a list in a little notebook that I can carry around while shopping, and it helps me organize the things I want to buy and not forget them.

The phrase 'a list on little notebook' lacks the article 'a' before 'little notebook'. Articles are necessary before singular countable nouns. The correct phrase is 'a little notebook'.

× Yes, I always make a list when I'm work 'cause it helps me to stay organized and increase my effect nerves.

✓ Yes, I always make a list when I'm working because it helps me stay organized and increase my effectiveness.

The phrase 'when I'm work' is incorrect; it should be 'when I'm working' to use the present participle form after 'I'm'. Also, 'increase my effect nerves' is unclear and likely a misuse of words; 'increase my effectiveness' is a clearer and grammatically correct phrase.

× But unlike shopping I prefer to use bigger note folks since my job has a lot of information then shoppings.

✓ But unlike shopping, I prefer to use bigger notebooks since my job has a lot of information compared to shopping.

The phrase 'bigger note folks' is incorrect; the intended phrase is likely 'bigger notebooks'. Also, 'then shoppings' is incorrect; 'shopping' is uncountable and does not have a plural form. The comparison should be 'compared to shopping'.

× Well from my perspective, some people just simply know what they're doing and so they don't really progress things like I do, but other people they just don't care.

✓ Well, from my perspective, some people just simply know what they're doing and so they don't really organize things like I do, but other people just don't care.

The phrase 'progress things' is incorrect; likely the intended meaning is 'organize things' or 'plan things'. Also, the phrase 'other people they just don't care' is redundant; 'other people just don't care' is correct.

× There just naturally clumsy and doesn't want to focus on.

✓ They are just naturally clumsy and don't want to focus.

'There' is incorrect; the correct pronoun is 'They'. Also, 'doesn't' should be 'don't' to agree with the plural subject 'They'. The phrase 'focus on' is incomplete without an object; it is better to say 'don't want to focus'.

× Do you prefer to make a list on paper or your phone?

✓ Do you prefer to make a list on paper or on your phone?

The preposition 'on' should be used consistently before both 'paper' and 'your phone' for parallel structure.

× Well, it depends on what things I make lists not.

✓ Well, it depends on what things I make lists for.

The phrase 'make lists not' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'make lists for' to indicate the purpose of the lists.

× If I make it to work and outdoors I preferred it's on my phone, but for personal things like in home I feel further down writing on paper.

✓ If I make it for work and outdoors, I prefer it on my phone, but for personal things like at home, I feel better writing on paper.

'Preferred' is past tense but the context requires present tense 'prefer'. 'It's' is incorrect; it should be 'it'. 'In home' should be 'at home'. 'Feel further down' is incorrect; likely intended is 'feel better'.