List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer has some good points but lacks clarity and coherence. Try to avoid incomplete sentences and unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. Also, correct vocabulary like 'legs list' should be 'shopping list' and 'a white' should be 'avoid'.

例: Yes, I always make a shopping list before I go shopping because it helps me stay focused and avoid impulse buying. Moreover, it keeps me organized so I don't forget anything important. For example, last week I bought everything on my list and saved time.

提案: Your answer is fragmented and lacks smooth flow. Try to form complete sentences and use linking words to connect your ideas. Be specific about how making lists helps your work efficiency. Avoid abrupt stops and incomplete thoughts.

例: Yes, I make a list for my work every day. I write down all the client names, tasks, and goals I need to achieve. This helps me stay organized and work more efficiently. For instance, it ensures I don't forget any important meetings or deadlines.

提案: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by using complete sentences and better linking words. Also, avoid repetition and clarify your points with examples or reasons. Use correct grammar and vocabulary for better clarity.

例: I think some people don't like making lists because they have a good memory and feel they don't need reminders. Also, they may not be impulsive buyers or forgetful about their work. For example, my friend remembers all his tasks without writing them down.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but is not clearly expressed. Use complete sentences and linking words to connect your points. Also, correct phrases like 'dictation' should be 'dictation' or 'memory practice'. Avoid grammatical errors and be concise.

例: I prefer to make my list on paper because it is safe and easy to carry in my pocket. Also, in places where phones are not allowed, I can still check my list. Additionally, writing by hand helps me remember things better.

× Yes, I always make a legs list before I go shopping.

✓ Yes, I always make a leg list before I go shopping.

The adjective 'legs' is incorrect here; the correct adjective is 'leg' to describe the type of list. In English, adjectives do not take plural forms when modifying nouns.

× It helped me stay focused and.

✓ It helps me stay focused.

The sentence is incomplete and uses past tense 'helped' which is inconsistent with the present habitual action. It should be in present tense 'helps' and the sentence should be complete.

× I just helped me remember things.

✓ It just helps me remember things.

The sentence is incomplete and uses past tense 'helped' incorrectly. The subject should be 'It' referring to the list, and the verb should be in present tense 'helps' to indicate habitual action.

× And a white.

✓ And avoids impulse buying.

The phrase 'And a white.' is incomplete and unclear. It seems the intended meaning is to say the list helps avoid impulse buying, so the sentence is corrected accordingly.

× Impulse buying and it is away.

✓ It helps avoid impulse buying.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. The corrected sentence clearly states the intended meaning that the list helps avoid impulse buying.

× 2. Stay organized and don't forget anything that is important.

✓ It helps me stay organized and not forget anything important.

The sentence is fragmented and lacks a subject. The correction adds the subject 'It helps me' and improves sentence flow.

× I like. All the client names.

✓ I like to list all the client names.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks clarity. Adding 'to list' clarifies the action and corrects the sentence structure.

× And what is my task for today?

✓ And what my tasks are for today.

The original is a question fragment; the correction turns it into a noun clause to fit the sentence context.

× And what I have. To achieve.

✓ And what I have to achieve.

The sentence is fragmented; combining the parts into a complete phrase improves clarity.

× Today and all the goals and schedule, I always write it down.

✓ Today, along with all the goals and schedule, I always write them down.

The sentence is fragmented and lacks proper conjunctions and pronoun agreement. The correction improves sentence structure and clarity.

× To work more efficiently and.

✓ To work more efficiently.

The sentence is incomplete; removing the conjunction 'and' completes the sentence.

× I feel some people have good memory and they feel that they don't need.

✓ I feel some people have a good memory and feel that they don't need to make a list.

The phrase 'have good memory' needs the article 'a' before 'good memory'. Also, the sentence is incomplete without specifying what they don't need.

× Becaused. Their memory is good and they are not impulsive buyer or they don't need anything to remind them about their work.

✓ Because their memory is good, they are not impulsive buyers and don't need anything to remind them about their work.

'Becaused' is incorrect; it should be 'Because'. Also, 'buyer' should be plural 'buyers' to agree with 'they'. The sentence is corrected for conjunction use and subject-verb agreement.

× I always make my list on paper. It is a way to keep it safe I.

✓ I always make my list on paper. It is a way to keep it safe.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'I' which is unnecessary and incorrect here. Removing 'I' completes the sentence properly.

× Keep the paper in my pocket so I can easily take it out. In places where phones aren't allowed and it is a old way to practice writing and your dictation as well, like your memory.

✓ I keep the paper in my pocket so I can easily take it out in places where phones aren't allowed. It is an old way to practice writing and dictation, which also helps your memory.

The original sentences are fragmented and have incorrect preposition use and article use ('a old' should be 'an old'). The correction improves sentence flow, preposition use, and article usage.