List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but has some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to form complete sentences and avoid repeating words. Also, provide a bit more detail to enrich your response.

例: Yes, I usually make a shopping list because it helps me remember everything I need to buy and saves time at the store.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Make sure to answer directly and clearly. Also, use linking words to explain your reasoning logically.

例: I don't usually make a list for my work because my tasks often change throughout the day, so a list might not be very effective.

提案: Your answer is difficult to understand due to grammar and unclear ideas. Try to express your opinion clearly and support it with reasons using proper sentence structure.

例: I think some people dislike making lists because they feel frustrated when their plans don't go as expected.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and has some grammatical errors. Try to complete your thoughts and use full sentences. Also, explain your preference with clear reasons.

例: I prefer to make my lists on my phone because I always have it with me, which makes it convenient to check or add items anytime.

× Yeah, I do make a list when when I'm shopping because I'm. Don't want to forget anything that I want to buy.

✓ Yeah, I do make a list when I'm shopping because I don't want to forget anything that I want to buy.

The sentence incorrectly splits 'I'm' and 'Don't' into two parts, causing a sentence fragment. The correct form is 'I don't want' as a single clause. Also, the repeated word 'when' is a typographical error and should be removed.

× I didn't make a list for my walk. Because there is so many changes that happen in a day, so if I do make a list for my word, it doesn't happen at what it should.

✓ I didn't make a list for my work because there are so many changes that happen in a day, so if I do make a list for my work, it doesn't happen as it should.

The word 'walk' is a typo and should be 'work'. Also, 'there is so many changes' is incorrect; 'there are so many changes' is correct because 'changes' is plural. The phrase 'it doesn't happen at what it should' is awkward; 'it doesn't happen as it should' is the correct idiomatic expression.

× I think, uh, some people don't like to make a list of 40 because I didn't like the plans are doesn't go what they want. So I think I did did it.

✓ I think, uh, some people don't like to make a list because they don't like when plans don't go the way they want. So I think I did it.

The sentence has pronoun confusion and tense inconsistency. 'I didn't like the plans are doesn't go' is incorrect; it should be 'they don't like when plans don't go'. Also, 'make a list of 40' is unclear and likely a misstatement. The repeated 'did did' is a typo and should be 'did'.

× I actually prefer to do my list on my phone because I am all always with my phone and most of the time I bring my phone with me so I. There is.

✓ I actually prefer to make my list on my phone because I am always with my phone and most of the time I bring it with me.

The phrase 'I am all always' is incorrect; 'I am always' is correct. Also, 'do my list' is better expressed as 'make my list'. The sentence fragment 'so I. There is.' is incomplete and should be removed or completed. Repetition of 'my phone' can be avoided by using 'it'.