List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but try to avoid repeating the word "also" multiple times. Use linking words like "and" or "which" to connect ideas smoothly. Additionally, you can add a specific example to make your answer more vivid.

例: Yes, I love creating my shopping list when I go to the grocery because it saves me a lot of time and helps me stay organized. For example, last week I planned my meals in advance and wrote down all the ingredients I needed, which prevented me from buying unnecessary items.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to form complete sentences and use linking words like "because" or "so" to explain your points clearly. Also, avoid unnecessary pauses or fillers.

例: Since I work in a hospital where time is very important, making a list of urgent errands helps me stay motivated and on track. Because of this, I find it very useful as it keeps me organized throughout the day.

提案: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by correcting the last sentence and using linking words like "so" or "therefore" to connect ideas. Also, try to avoid ending sentences abruptly and provide a clearer explanation.

例: I believe some individuals are very spontaneous, so instead of creating a list to organize their activities, they find it time-consuming. Therefore, they prefer doing the actual work rather than making a list of their tasks.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by combining sentences to avoid starting with "Because" and by using linking words like "so" or "therefore". Also, try to be more concise and avoid redundancy.

例: Generally, I prefer using my cell phone because it is convenient and accessible, so I use the notes application to organize my To-Do List, such as creating a shopping list before going to the grocery store.

× Since I work in hospital, setting where time is really important and precious, making a list of the urgent.

✓ Since I work in a hospital, a setting where time is really important and precious, making a list of the urgent errands that I need to do really helps me a lot to stay motivated and stay on track.

The phrase 'work in hospital' is missing the article 'a' before 'hospital'. In English, when referring to a singular countable noun like 'hospital', an article is required. Also, the sentence was incomplete and needed to be connected properly to convey the full meaning.

× Since I work in hospital, setting where time is really important and precious, making a list of the urgent. Errands that I need to do really helps me a lot to stay motivated and stay on track.

✓ Since I work in a hospital, a setting where time is really important and precious, making a list of the urgent errands that I need to do really helps me a lot to stay motivated and stay on track.

The original sentence was fragmented and incorrectly split by a period after 'urgent'. Combining the sentence properly improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I believe that there are some individuals who are very spontaneous. Instead of creating a list to organize their activities, they find it time consuming.

✓ I believe that there are some individuals who are very spontaneous. Instead of creating a list to organize their activities, they find it time-consuming.

The phrase 'time consuming' should be hyphenated as 'time-consuming' when used as an adjective before a noun or as a predicate adjective to describe something.

× That is why they prefer doing the actual work than making a list of their activities of.

✓ That is why they prefer doing the actual work rather than making a list of their activities.

The phrase 'prefer doing the actual work than' is incorrect; the correct form is 'prefer doing the actual work rather than'. Also, the preposition 'of' at the end is unnecessary and incorrect.

× Generally I prefer using my cell phone. Because it is convenient and accessible, I use my notes application in organizing my To Do List and creating, for example, a shopping list that I need to buy when I go to the grocery.

✓ Generally, I prefer using my cell phone because it is convenient and accessible. I use my notes application to organize my To Do List and create, for example, a shopping list that I need when I go to the grocery store.

Starting a sentence with 'Because' creates a sentence fragment. Combining the sentences properly improves flow. Also, 'in organizing' should be 'to organize' and 'creating' should be parallel as 'create'. The phrase 'go to the grocery' is incomplete; it should be 'go to the grocery store'.