List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but a bit long and slightly unclear due to repetition and grammar errors. Try to make your response more concise and fluent by avoiding redundancy and correcting sentence structure. For example, you can say, "Yes, I always make a shopping list on my mobile phone because I find it hard to remember everything I need."

例: Yes, I always make a shopping list on my mobile phone because I find it hard to remember everything I need.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and has grammatical mistakes. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to connect your points. For example, you can say, "No, I don't make lists for work because I find them unsuitable and time-consuming. Instead, I follow my schedule since the workplace is dynamic and plans often change."

例: No, I don't make lists for work because I find them unsuitable and time-consuming. Instead, I follow my schedule since the workplace is dynamic and plans often change.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammar errors and hesitations. Try to speak more confidently and use correct grammar. Also, use linking words to make your answer coherent. For example, "Some people dislike making lists because they believe it wastes time and energy. Moreover, they prefer following a schedule since plans can change frequently in dynamic situations."

例: Some people dislike making lists because they believe it wastes time and energy. Moreover, they prefer following a schedule since plans can change frequently in dynamic situations.

提案: Your answer is understandable but has some grammatical mistakes and redundancy. Try to make your sentences clearer and more concise. For example, "I prefer making lists on my mobile phone because it's convenient, I don't need to carry paper, and I can check the list anytime without worrying about losing it."

例: I prefer making lists on my mobile phone because it's convenient, I don't need to carry paper, and I can check the list anytime without worrying about losing it.

× Yes, I make a list whenever I go for shopping because there are a lot of things that I want to buy from a market, so I'm not able to. Able to recall all the things so that's why I make a list or on my mobile phone.

✓ Yes, I make a list whenever I go shopping because there are a lot of things that I want to buy from the market, so I'm not able to recall all the things. That's why I make a list on my mobile phone.

The phrase 'go for shopping' is incorrect; the correct form is 'go shopping' because 'shopping' functions as a gerund here. Also, 'Able to recall' is incomplete and should be connected properly. Additionally, 'from a market' should be 'from the market' as it refers to a specific place. The sentence was also fragmented and needed restructuring for clarity.

× Yes, I make a list whenever I go for shopping because there are a lot of things that I want to buy from a market, so I'm not able to. Able to recall all the things so that's why I make a list or on my mobile phone.

✓ Yes, I make a list whenever I go shopping because there are a lot of things that I want to buy from the market, so I'm not able to recall all the things. That's why I make a list on my mobile phone.

The article 'a' before 'market' is incorrect because it refers to a specific market, so 'the' should be used instead. Also, 'a list or on my mobile phone' is incorrect; it should be 'a list on my mobile phone'.

× No, I never make a list for a work because I think it is a not suitable and a time time with activity and also energy waste activity.

✓ No, I never make a list for work because I think it is not suitable and a waste of time and energy.

The article 'a' before 'work' is incorrect because 'work' is an uncountable noun here and does not need an article. Also, 'a time time with activity and also energy waste activity' is awkward and incorrect; it should be 'a waste of time and energy'.

× I go through the schedule because there are a lot of challenges, there are a lot of changes occur in the workplace so that.

✓ I go through the schedule because there are a lot of challenges and a lot of changes occurring in the workplace.

The phrase 'changes occur' should be 'changes occurring' to correctly use the present participle form to describe ongoing changes. Also, the sentence was incomplete and needed to be finished properly.

× Some people don't like making list because they think that it is abused of energy and time.

✓ Some people don't like making lists because they think that it is a waste of energy and time.

The noun 'list' should be plural 'lists' because it refers to the general activity of making lists. Also, 'abused of energy and time' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'a waste of energy and time'.

× Some people don't like making list because they think that it is abused of energy and time.

✓ Some people don't like making lists because they think that it is a waste of energy and time.

The article 'a' is missing before 'waste' in the phrase 'a waste of energy and time'. Also, 'making list' should be 'making lists' as explained earlier.

× They want to go through a, uh, schedule and the feel that things are not, uh, same and also plan are not a useful in a dynamic situation.

✓ They want to go through a schedule and they feel that things are not the same and also plans are not useful in a dynamic situation.

The pronoun 'the' before 'feel' is incorrect; it should be 'they'. Also, 'plan are' should be 'plans are' to agree in number. 'a useful' should be 'useful' without 'a' because 'useful' is an adjective.

× They want to go through a, uh, schedule and the feel that things are not, uh, same and also plan are not a useful in a dynamic situation.

✓ They want to go through a schedule and they feel that things are not the same and also plans are not useful in a dynamic situation.

The article 'a' before 'useful' is incorrect because 'useful' is an adjective and does not require an article. Also, 'plan' should be plural 'plans'.

× I prefer to make a list on while you are on my mobile phone because it is not a.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my mobile phone because it is not necessary to carry paper everywhere.

The phrase 'on while you are on my mobile phone' is incorrect and confusing. The correct preposition is 'on my mobile phone'. Also, the sentence was incomplete and needed correction for clarity.

× I prefer to make a list on while you are on my mobile phone because it is not a. It is not necessary to take a paper everywhere and it is also the chances of a loss of paper, but safe and we can we can check the list whenever we want.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my mobile phone because it is not necessary to carry paper everywhere. Also, there is a chance of losing paper, but it is safe on the phone and we can check the list whenever we want.

The original sentence is fragmented and has poor structure. 'It is not a.' is incomplete. 'It is not necessary to take a paper everywhere' should be 'carry paper everywhere'. 'It is also the chances of a loss of paper' should be 'there is a chance of losing paper'. The sentence was restructured for clarity and correctness.