List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ваш ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и нечеткие выражения, что снижает его естественность и эффективность. Рекомендуется использовать полные предложения и избегать повторений, а также связать идеи логично с помощью союзов.

例: Yes, I always make a list when I go shopping because it helps me save money by buying only the things I really need.

提案: Ответ содержит ошибки в грамматике и структуре, а также нечеткие выражения. Следует использовать связные предложения и более точные формулировки, чтобы сделать ответ более понятным и логичным.

例: Actually, I don't have a job, but when I prepare for my exams, I usually make lists for a day or even a whole month to understand what I need to do each week and month, which helps me stay organized.

提案: Ответ очень непонятен из-за грамматических ошибок и отсутствия связности. Рекомендуется строить предложения логично, использовать подходящие слова и объяснять причины ясно и подробно.

例: I think some people don't like making lists because they prefer to be spontaneous, and sometimes they forget what they wrote down, so the list becomes useless.

提案: Ответ содержит ошибки и нечеткие выражения. Следует использовать правильные слова и грамматические конструкции, а также связать идеи логично для более естественного звучания.

例: I prefer to make lists on my phone because it is always with me when I go shopping, and it's not convenient to carry a paper list everywhere.

× Yes, I always make a list when I go. To the shop, it helps me to save my money.

✓ Yes, I always make a list when I go to the shop. It helps me to save my money.

The phrase 'To the shop' is incorrectly separated and capitalized. It should be connected to the previous sentence as 'go to the shop' to form a correct prepositional phrase indicating destination.

× And. By only things that I'm really neat for. Need for.

✓ And buy only things that I really need.

The words 'By' and 'neat' are incorrect here. 'By' should be 'buy' (verb), and 'neat' should be 'need' (verb). Also, the sentence fragments should be combined into a complete sentence for clarity.

× Actually I don't have a work, but when I am preparing for my exams I usually make a list As for one day As for a whole month too.

✓ Actually, I don't have work, but when I am preparing for my exams I usually make a list for one day or for a whole month too.

The phrase 'a work' is incorrect; 'work' is uncountable here and should not have an article. Also, 'As for one day As for a whole month too' is awkward; it should be 'for one day or for a whole month too' to correctly use prepositions and conjunctions.

× Understand what I need to do on this week, months and a year and it helps me to keep me organized.

✓ I understand what I need to do this week, this month, and this year, and it helps me to keep organized.

The preposition 'on' is incorrectly used with time expressions like 'this week'. Also, 'months' should be singular 'month' to match 'this'. The phrase 'helps me to keep me organized' is redundant; 'helps me to keep organized' is correct.

× I suggest that some people don't like to making lists 'cause they. Want to be a whole tick? Causes a emagazines.

✓ I suggest that some people don't like making lists because they want to be spontaneous. It causes stress.

The phrase 'don't like to making' is incorrect; it should be 'don't like making' (verb + -ing form). 'Want to be a whole tick?' is unclear and likely a mishearing; 'want to be spontaneous' fits better. 'Causes a emagazines' is nonsensical and replaced with 'It causes stress' for clarity.

× Sometimes they can. Understand that they need and other things that the writing their list, so it's unused.

✓ Sometimes they can't understand what they need and other things when writing their list, so it's unused.

The sentence is fragmented and has incorrect verb forms. 'can. Understand' should be 'can't understand'. 'that the writing their list' is incorrect; it should be 'when writing their list' to use the correct preposition and gerund form.

× I prefer to make least on my phone calls.

✓ I prefer to make lists on my phone.

'make least' is a typo; it should be 'make lists'. 'on my phone calls' is incorrect; it should be 'on my phone' to indicate the device used.

× I think that is more useful for my for me, 'cause phone is always with me when I'm going out for shopping or some grocery stores and.

✓ I think that is more useful for me because my phone is always with me when I go shopping or to grocery stores.

The phrase 'for my for me' is redundant and incorrect; 'for me' is correct. 'phone is always with me' lacks the possessive 'my'. 'going out for shopping or some grocery stores' is incorrect; it should be 'go shopping or to grocery stores'.

× It's not really helpful to go everywhere with the least.

✓ It's not really helpful to go everywhere with the list.

'least' is a typo; it should be 'list'. The sentence is otherwise correct.