List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ должен быть более структурированным и естественным. Следует использовать полные предложения, избегать повторов и грамматических ошибок. Например, начните с прямого ответа, затем добавьте конкретные детали, используя связующие слова.

例: Yes, I always make a shopping list before I go to the store because it helps me remember what I need and saves time. For example, I usually write down groceries and household items to avoid forgetting anything.

提案: Ответ должен быть более связным и содержательным. Используйте связующие слова для логического перехода и объясните, почему список помогает в работе, с конкретными примерами.

例: Yes, I always make a to-do list for my work because it helps me organize tasks efficiently. For instance, by listing my daily duties, I can prioritize and complete them on time.

提案: Ответ содержит много грамматических ошибок и неясностей. Следует использовать правильные конструкции и объяснить причины более чётко, избегая ошибок и двусмысленностей.

例: Some people dislike making lists because they find it boring and feel it limits their creativity. Additionally, they prefer a more spontaneous approach to managing their tasks.

提案: Ответ должен быть более связным и грамматически правильным. Используйте полные предложения и объясните преимущества использования телефона для списков с конкретными деталями.

例: I prefer to make lists on my phone because it is more convenient and modern. Also, it's less likely to lose my phone than a piece of paper, so I can always access my list.

× Absolutely make a list to shopping.

✓ I absolutely make a list when shopping.

The original sentence lacks a subject and uses an incorrect preposition 'to' instead of 'when'. The corrected sentence includes the subject 'I' and uses the correct preposition 'when' to indicate the time of the action.

× Doesn't make a list for shopping.

✓ I don't make a list for shopping.

The original sentence is missing the subject 'I' and uses the auxiliary verb incorrectly. The corrected sentence includes the subject and uses the correct negative form 'don't' for the first person singular.

× The list like that there is a some products and I think that.

✓ A list like that has some products, I think.

The original sentence is awkward and ungrammatical. The correction rearranges the sentence to a clearer structure, using 'has' to indicate possession and removing unnecessary words.

× I make a list for any job and I think that is definitely good for and the good for work and the four works plan and I think that.

✓ I make a list for any job, and I think that is definitely good for work and planning.

The original sentence is repetitive and contains unclear phrases like 'the four works plan'. The correction simplifies and clarifies the meaning, removing redundancy and correcting the phrase to 'planning'.

× Becauses making this is so boring and it undisturbed to creative people and.

✓ Because making this is so boring and it disturbs creative people.

The original sentence has a misspelled conjunction 'Becauses' and an incorrect word 'undisturbed' which should be 'disturbs'. The correction fixes the spelling and word choice to convey the intended meaning.

× And some people dislike making this because they find it restrictive and the preferred and more spending US approach to managing their death.

✓ Some people dislike making lists because they find it restrictive and prefer a more spontaneous approach to managing their day.

The original sentence has unclear pronoun references and incorrect words like 'the preferred' and 'more spending US' and 'death' instead of 'day'. The correction clarifies pronouns and corrects vocabulary to make the sentence meaningful.

× Actually I prefer to make a list. On my phone. BIC AWS is. Is like modern and you can lose your paper but not your phone I think.

✓ Actually, I prefer to make a list on my phone because it is modern, and you can lose your paper but not your phone, I think.

The original sentences are fragmented and contain unclear phrases like 'BIC AWS is'. The correction combines the fragments into a coherent sentence and replaces unclear parts with appropriate words.