List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answerが少し不自然で、文法ミスや言い回しの繰り返しがあります。より自然で効果的な答えにするために、簡潔に主題文を述べ、その後に理由や具体例を付け加えましょう。例えば、「I don't usually make a shopping list because I prefer to shop spontaneously. Sometimes, making a list limits me if I want to buy something not on it.」のように。

例: I don't usually make a shopping list because I prefer to shop spontaneously. Sometimes, making a list limits me if I want to buy something not on it.

提案: 答えが不明瞭で文法的な誤りが多いです。質問に直接答え、理由や具体的な状況を簡潔に説明しましょう。例えば、「I try to make lists for my work, but I often don't follow them strictly. So now, I just note important tasks and focus on completing them.」のように。

例: I try to make lists for my work, but I often don't follow them strictly. So now, I just note important tasks and focus on completing them.

提案: 答えは内容的に良いですが、言い回しが不自然で繰り返しがあります。より自然に、理由を明確に述べ、接続詞を使って論理的に繋げましょう。例えば、「Some people dislike making lists because they prefer to go with the flow. Following a list can feel restrictive and inflexible to them.」のように。

例: Some people dislike making lists because they prefer to go with the flow. Following a list can feel restrictive and inflexible to them.

提案: 答えは内容的に理解できますが、文法や表現のミスが多く、冗長です。簡潔で自然な表現にし、接続詞を適切に使いましょう。例えば、「I prefer making lists on my phone because I often lose paper lists. Also, phone lists are clear, secure, and easy to access.」のように。

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because I often lose paper lists. Also, phone lists are clear, secure, and easy to access.

× I usually like to just go around and shopping mall and then.

✓ I usually like to just go around the shopping mall and then.

The verb 'go' should be followed by the base form or a prepositional phrase, not the '-ing' form 'shopping'. Here, 'shopping mall' is a noun phrase and needs the definite article 'the'. So, 'go around the shopping mall' is correct.

× When I when I list something our our guide.

✓ When I list something, our guide...

The sentence is incomplete and contains repeated words 'when I' and 'our'. It needs to be restructured for clarity and completeness.

× Confused if I want something else which is on on the list.

✓ I get confused if I want something else which is on the list.

The sentence lacks a subject and verb to form a complete sentence. Adding 'I get' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'on on' is a repetition error.

× I always tried to make up list for my work.

✓ I always try to make up a list for my work.

The use of 'tried' (past tense) conflicts with 'always', which indicates a habitual action. The present tense 'try' is appropriate. Also, 'make up list' needs an article 'a' before 'list'.

× However, I still end up not following the blast, so these days I.

✓ However, I still end up not following the list, so these days I...

The word 'blast' is likely a typo for 'list'. The sentence is incomplete and needs to be finished for clarity.

× Just come. Get a little bit of like. On a point where like I need to do and I just do.

✓ I just come to a point where I know what I need to do, and I just do it.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. They need to be combined and rephrased to form a coherent sentence.

× I think some people like to go by flows when they when they follow the list, they would feel really packed and they don't, they don't find it.

✓ I think some people like to go with the flow; when they follow the list, they feel really restricted and don't find it flexible.

The phrase 'go by flows' is incorrect; the correct idiom is 'go with the flow'. Also, the sentence is repetitive and needs conjunctions to connect ideas properly.

× Flexible to change something or adding something else.

✓ Flexible to change something or add something else.

Parallel structure requires the verbs to be in the same form. 'Change' and 'add' should both be base forms after 'to'.

× I like to. I prefer to make a list on on my phone because when I have when I write on paper, I tend to lose it or.

✓ I like to, I prefer to make a list on my phone because when I write on paper, I tend to lose it or...

The repetition 'on on' is an error. Also, the sentence is incomplete and needs to be finished for clarity.

× I tend to like a message and I cannot see anymore.

✓ I tend to misplace it and cannot see it anymore.

The phrase 'like a message' is unclear and likely a misuse. 'Misplace it' fits the context better. Also, 'cannot see anymore' needs an object 'it'.

× On the other side and on the other hand, when I listen on my phone, it makes it clear, secure and then.

✓ On the other hand, when I listen on my phone, it makes it clear, secure, and easy to see.

'On the other side' and 'on the other hand' are redundant; only one is needed. Also, the sentence is incomplete and needs to finish the list of qualities.