List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors that affect naturalness and effectiveness. Try to form a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

例: Yes, I usually make a shopping list to remember everything I need. This helps me keep track of my expenses and stick to my budget. For example, I list all the items and estimate their prices before I go shopping.

提案: Your answer is confusing and lacks clarity. Make sure to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence. Use simple, correct sentences and provide specific reasons or examples to support your answer. Avoid unclear phrases and maintain coherence.

例: No, I don't usually make a list for my work because I rely on my skills and memory to complete tasks. However, I try to stay organized by prioritizing my duties each day.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Avoid making negative judgments like calling people lazy. Instead, provide a polite and clear explanation with specific reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: Some people don't like making lists because they believe they can remember everything without writing it down. Also, they might find making lists time-consuming or unnecessary.

提案: Your answer is understandable but could be more natural and fluent. Use complete sentences and linking words to explain your preference clearly. Avoid short, fragmented sentences and provide specific reasons.

例: I prefer to make my shopping list on my phone because it is convenient and easy to edit. For instance, I use the notes app to save and update my list anytime before I go shopping.

× Shop Yeah. Yeah, I'm at least for my shopping. To remember all the things I need and calculate all the bill of this thing so I can make my budget. Good are according to my financial. Position.

✓ Yes, I make a list for my shopping to remember all the things I need and calculate the total bill so I can make my budget according to my financial position.

The original sentences are fragmented and lack proper sentence structure. Combining the ideas into a coherent sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Good are according to my financial. Position.

✓ It is good according to my financial position.

The original sentence lacks a clear subject and verb, and the pronoun 'Good' is incorrectly used. Adding 'It is' clarifies the meaning and corrects the pronoun usage.

× No, I don't make a list for my work, I do. What is it? Come for me? Am I doing very professional and with my skill? That's it.

✓ No, I don't make a list for my work. I do my work professionally using my skills. That's it.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. Rephrasing into complete sentences with proper structure improves understanding and grammatical correctness.

× Because it's so they're so lazy and they want they can, they can remember all the list they want. That's why they cannot make girly.

✓ Because they are lazy and think they can remember all the items on the list. That's why they don't make lists.

The original sentence has unclear pronoun references and awkward phrasing. Correcting pronoun usage and simplifying the sentence improves clarity.

× Yeah, I prepare a list on my phone. So I can get all the things I need according to that list and my phone. Help me for. Keep and save that list on my note application. That's it.

✓ Yes, I prepare a list on my phone so I can get all the things I need according to that list. My phone helps me keep and save that list in my notes application. That's it.

The original sentence has incorrect prepositions and fragmented phrases. Correcting prepositions and combining sentences improves grammatical accuracy and clarity.