List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains some incomplete or incorrect phrases (e.g., 'browse around the *** and choose necessary items' and 'And salt freely'). To improve, try to give a clear, concise response directly addressing the question, avoid filler or unclear words, and keep your sentences connected logically. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and provide specific reasons for your preference.

例: I usually don't make a shopping list because I enjoy being spontaneous. I like to browse the store freely and pick items as I go, which feels less restrictive to me.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains incomplete sentences and confusing phrases (e.g., 'list in sewers'). To improve, respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, explain why you make lists for work, and provide specific details. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: Yes, I always make a list for work because it helps me stay organized. Unlike shopping lists, work lists include important tasks I need to complete, which ensures I don't forget anything.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be clearer and more concise. Avoid repeating similar ideas and use linking words to improve coherence. Also, try to provide more specific reasons or examples to support your opinion.

例: Some people dislike making lists because they find it restrictive. They feel that following a list limits their creativity and freedom, as it forces them to stick to predetermined tasks.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant but contains minor grammatical errors and some awkward phrasing (e.g., 'even on probably places'). To improve, focus on using correct grammar and more natural expressions. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because I can type quickly and update them anytime. For instance, when I'm in public, it's easy to add items on my phone rather than carrying paper.

× I personally don't prefer to prepare, at least whenever I go shopping as it feels kind of restrictive.

✓ I personally don't prefer to prepare a list, at least whenever I go shopping, as it feels kind of restrictive.

The original sentence is missing the object 'a list' after 'prepare', which makes the sentence incomplete and unclear. Adding 'a list' clarifies what is not preferred to be prepared. Also, commas are added for better sentence flow.

× When I'm quite a spontaneous person who likes to browse around the *** and choose necessary items.

✓ I am quite a spontaneous person who likes to browse around the store and choose necessary items.

The original sentence is a fragment starting with 'When' but lacking a main clause. Changing it to a complete sentence by removing 'When' and specifying 'store' instead of '***' makes it grammatically correct and clear.

× And salt freely.

✓ and shop freely.

The phrase 'And salt freely' is unclear and likely a typo. Replacing 'salt' with 'shop' makes the sentence meaningful and grammatically correct.

× Talking about work, I think it is kind of unusual to not make a list whenever I go work.

✓ Talking about work, I think it is kind of unusual not to make a list whenever I go to work.

The phrase 'to not make' is better expressed as 'not to make' for natural English. Also, 'go work' should be 'go to work' to be grammatically correct.

× Because making a list for shopping is different than making a list for work.

✓ Because making a list for shopping is different from making a list for work.

The correct preposition after 'different' is 'from', not 'than'. This is a common preposition error.

× As for work I, I have to personally organize and. And list in sewers.

✓ As for work, I have to personally organize and list my tasks.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'List in sewers' seems to be a mishearing or typo. Rewriting the sentence to 'organize and list my tasks' makes it clear and grammatically correct.

× My items are anything necessary to do.

✓ My items are anything necessary to do.

This sentence is awkward and unclear. A better correction would be: 'My items include anything necessary to do.' However, since the instruction is to only correct mistakes that meet the grammar problem types, and this is more about clarity than grammar, no correction is applied here.

× Maybe because they feel making a list it's kind of restrictive for them which restricts their creativity and their freedom as making a list is like.

✓ Maybe because they feel making a list is kind of restrictive for them, which restricts their creativity and their freedom, as making a list is like...

The sentence is a run-on and missing proper punctuation. Adding commas and correcting 'it's' to 'is' improves clarity and grammar.

× Is like following the orders of something that you have written an it is kind of understandable.

✓ It is like following the orders of something that you have written, and it is kind of understandable.

The original sentence is fragmented and missing a subject at the start. Adding 'It' and correcting 'an' to 'and' fixes the sentence structure.

× I usually prefer to make a list on my phone rather than on paper.

✓ I usually prefer to make a list on my phone rather than on paper.

This sentence is grammatically correct and needs no correction.

× As I can type fast on my phone, it is rather convenient for me to use it even on probably places.

✓ As I can type fast on my phone, it is rather convenient for me to use it even in probably places.

The phrase 'on probably places' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'in' for places. However, 'probably places' is awkward; likely the intended phrase is 'probably public places' or 'probably any place'. Since 'probably places' is unclear, a better correction is 'in various places' but per instructions, only preposition correction is applied.

× For example, if I'm in public, I can write it on my phone, prepare my next list for whatever I'm going to do.

✓ For example, if I'm in public, I can write it on my phone and prepare my next list for whatever I'm going to do.

The sentence is a run-on and missing a conjunction between two actions. Adding 'and' connects the two verbs properly.

× I think it is more convenient to do on our phone rather than on paper.

✓ I think it is more convenient to do on my phone rather than on paper.

The pronoun 'our' is inconsistent with the speaker's perspective. Changing it to 'my' matches the personal preference context.