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提案: Та хариултаа илүү тодорхой, логик холбоотой, алдаагүй хэлбэрээр илэрхийлэх хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, үгсийн дараалал, дүрмийн алдааг засаж, илүү тодорхой тайлбар өгөөрэй.

例: Yes, I usually make a shopping list on my notes app to remember the groceries I need to buy for my home.

提案: Хариултаа илүү ойлгомжтой, бүтээлч байдлаар илэрхийлж, холбоос үг ашиглан логик дараалал үүсгээрэй. Мөн үгсийн алдааг засаж, илүү тодорхой тайлбар өгөөрэй.

例: I don't work because I am a student. However, I usually plan my study schedule to finish my assignments on time.

提案: Хариултаа илүү үр дүнтэй, тодорхой тайлбарласан хэлбэрээр илэрхийлж, холбоос үг ашиглан санаагаа өргөжүүлээрэй. Мөн илүү нарийвчилсан жишээ оруулбал сайн.

例: In my opinion, some people don't like making lists because they are either too busy or lazy. However, I think everyone should try making to-do lists to organize their life better.

提案: Хариултаа илүү тодорхой, дүрмийн алдаагүй, логик холбоотойгоор илэрхийлж, үгсийн давтагдлыг багасгаарай. Мөн илүү нарийвчилсан тайлбар өгч болно.

例: I prefer making my to-do lists on my phone, especially using the Reminder app, because I can set the time and date for tasks and check them off when completed. It helps me remember what to do next.

× Mostly I make a list on my notes app to remember what should I grab from the groceries and mostly it's like grocery or.

✓ Mostly I make a list on my notes app to remember what I should grab from the groceries and mostly it's like grocery or.

The sentence incorrectly uses the question word order 'what should I grab' in a statement. In English, indirect questions within statements require the subject before the verb, so it should be 'what I should grab'. Монгол хэл дээр: Энэ өгүүлбэрт асуултын хэлбэрийн үг дараалал буруу хэрэглэгдсэн. Мэдэгдэл өгүүлбэрт асуултын хэлбэрийн үг орсон үед сэдэв эхэлж, дараа үйл үг ирэх ёстой.

× Mostly I make a list on my notes app to remember what should I grab from the groceries and mostly it's like grocery or.

✓ Mostly I make a list on my notes app to remember what I should grab from the groceries and mostly it's like groceries or.

The word 'grocery' is singular and usually refers to a store or a type of food, but here the plural 'groceries' (meaning food items) is appropriate. Монгол хэл дээр: 'Grocery' гэдэг нь нэг зүйл буюу дэлгүүрийг заадаг бол 'groceries' нь хүнсний зүйлсийг олон тоогоор заана.

× For my work I don't work, I study. So from my learning experience I've mostly plan.

✓ For my work I don't work, I study. So from my learning experience I've mostly planned.

The present perfect tense 'I've' requires the past participle form of the verb. 'Plan' is base form; the correct past participle is 'planned'. Монгол хэл дээр: 'I've' гэдэг нь 'I have' гэсэн товчлол бөгөөд дараа нь үйл үгийн өнгөрсөн тэнцвэртэй хэлбэр буюу past participle ирэх ёстой.

× So from my learning experience I've mostly plan.

✓ So from my learning experience I've mostly planned.

Same as above, 'plan' should be 'planned' as past participle after 'I've'. Монгол хэл дээр: 'I've' дараа үйл үгийн өнгөрсөн тэнцвэртэй хэлбэр хэрэгтэй.

× My journey, but it's not like making a list I plan.

✓ My journey, but it's not like making a list; I plan.

The sentence is fragmented and lacks proper punctuation. Adding a semicolon clarifies the two related ideas. Монгол хэл дээр: Өгүүлбэрийн бүтэц алдагдсан тул цэг таслал нэмэх хэрэгтэй.

× When should I? Finish my. Works. Not like.

✓ When should I finish my work? Not like that.

The sentence is fragmented and incorrectly punctuated. 'Works' should be singular 'work' when referring to tasks. The question form 'When should I finish my work?' is correct. Монгол хэл дээр: 'Works' нь олон тооны утгатай боловч энд нэг ажлыг хэлж байгаа тул 'work' гэж бичих ёстой. Мөн өгүүлбэрийг бүрэн болгох хэрэгтэй.

× Some people don't usually do to do lists 'cause they are.

✓ Some people don't usually make to-do lists because they are.

The verb 'do' is incorrect with 'to-do lists'; the correct verb is 'make'. Also, 'cause' should be 'because' for formal correctness. Монгол хэл дээр: 'To-do list'-тэй хамт 'do' биш 'make' үйл үг хэрэглэнэ.

× From my perspective, very should start doing To Do List too.

✓ From my perspective, everyone should start doing To-Do Lists too.

'Very' is incorrect here; the intended word is 'everyone'. Also, 'To Do List' should be plural 'To-Do Lists' for general meaning. Монгол хэл дээр: 'Very' гэдэг нь энд утгагүй, 'everyone' буюу 'бүгд' гэж бичих ёстой.

× I mostly prefer doing my To Do List on my phone, specially on the app named Reminder 'cause I can set the time, date and what should I do on it an I can check when I'm done.

✓ I mostly prefer doing my To-Do List on my phone, especially on the app named Reminder because I can set the time, date, and what I should do on it, and I can check when I'm done.

'Specially' should be 'especially'. The phrase 'what should I do' should be 'what I should do' in indirect statement. Also, commas and conjunctions are added for clarity. Монгол хэл дээр: 'Specially' биш 'especially' гэж бичих ёстой. Мөн асуултын хэлбэрийг мэдэгдэл болгож өөрчлөх хэрэгтэй.

× I need reminds me what should I do next?

✓ I need it to remind me what I should do next.

The original sentence is ungrammatical. 'Need' requires an object and an infinitive verb form. Also, 'what should I do' should be 'what I should do' in indirect speech. Монгол хэл дээр: 'Need' үйл үг дараа объект болон 'to' + үйл үгийн үндсэн хэлбэртэй байх ёстой. Мөн асуултын хэлбэрийг мэдэгдэл болгож өөрчлөх хэрэгтэй.