List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat clear but contains grammatical errors and some redundancy. Try to use correct grammar, avoid double negatives, and be more concise. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: It depends on the occasion. For important events like weddings or ceremonies, I always make a list to avoid forgetting essential items. However, for everyday casual shopping, I usually rely on my memory.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Make sure to answer fully and clearly. Use complete sentences and explain how making lists helps you. Avoid fragmented sentences.

例: Yes, I make lists for my work because they help me stay organized and plan my tasks effectively. When I forget to make a to-do list, I tend to make more mistakes.

提案: Your answer is good but contains some pronunciation or spelling errors and could be more concise. Use linking words to improve coherence and correct minor mistakes.

例: I think some people dislike making lists because they prefer spontaneity. They enjoy going with the flow and believe that not everything needs to be planned. Sometimes, it's nice to let the day unfold naturally, valuing freedom over strict schedules.

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and ends abruptly. Try to be more direct and avoid unnecessary phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas and finish your answer clearly.

例: I usually make lists on my phone because it's always with me and more convenient than using paper and pen. Therefore, I prefer digital notes for organizing my tasks.

× If I'm shopping for wedding or ceremonies then I have to make a list so that I don't forget the important stuffs.

✓ If I'm shopping for a wedding or ceremonies then I have to make a list so that I don't forget the important stuff.

The word 'wedding' is singular and needs an article 'a' before it. Also, 'stuffs' is incorrect because 'stuff' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized.

× It depends upon how much shopping I got to do on that particular day.

✓ It depends on how much shopping I have to do on that particular day.

The correct preposition after 'depends' is 'on', not 'upon'. Also, 'got to do' is informal and incorrect in this context; 'have to do' is appropriate.

× If it's for everyday an casual shopping then I can remember without no.

✓ If it's for everyday and casual shopping then I can remember without any list.

The phrase 'without no' is a double negative and incorrect. It should be 'without any list' or 'without a list'. Also, 'an' should be 'and'.

× Yeah, it helps me stay organized and planned on the days that I forget to make A to do list, I am. All to make some mistakes so I.

✓ Yeah, it helps me stay organized and plan. On the days that I forget to make a to-do list, I tend to make some mistakes.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Planned' should be 'plan' to match 'stay organized'. The phrase 'I am. All to make some mistakes so I.' is incomplete and needs restructuring.

× I think some people don't like making lists because they prefer spontan ADN.

✓ I think some people don't like making lists because they prefer spontaneity and...

'Spontan ADN' seems to be a typo or incorrect phrase. The correct noun form is 'spontaneity'. The sentence is incomplete, but correction focuses on the error.

× They enjoy going with the flow they filled, that not everything needs to be planned or organized, and sometimes it's nice to live the day unfold naturally.

✓ They enjoy going with the flow; they feel that not everything needs to be planned or organized, and sometimes it's nice to let the day unfold naturally.

The sentence is run-on and has incorrect words: 'filled' should be 'feel', and 'live the day unfold' should be 'let the day unfold'. Proper punctuation is needed.

× For them, having the freedom to decide what to do without sticking to strict schedule is more important than following a list.

✓ For them, having the freedom to decide what to do without sticking to a strict schedule is more important than following a list.

The phrase 'sticking to strict schedule' is missing the article 'a' before 'strict schedule'.

× But it takes a lot of work to grab paper and pen, so most of the times it just notes on my phone and it's convenient as well.

✓ But it takes a lot of effort to grab paper and pen, so most of the time I just take notes on my phone and it's convenient as well.

'Most of the times' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'most of the time'. Also, 'notes on my phone' needs a verb like 'take' to be correct.