List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, and avoid unnecessary words. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and provide specific reasons or examples.

例: No, I don't usually make a list when I shop because I prefer to buy things spontaneously. For example, I often pick items that catch my eye without planning ahead.

提案: Your answer shows some structure but is unclear and contains fragmented sentences. Try to form complete sentences, use linking words to connect ideas, and provide specific details about how making lists helps you.

例: Yes, I always make a list for my work. I arrange tasks in order of priority, which helps me stay organized and complete everything on time.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and has grammatical mistakes. Provide a clear topic sentence, explain reasons with linking words, and avoid incomplete thoughts.

例: Some people don't like making lists because they find it annoying and prefer to do things spontaneously. This way, they can enjoy more freedom without strict plans.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains fragmented sentences and some unclear parts. Try to use complete sentences, link your ideas smoothly, and provide specific reasons for your preference.

例: I prefer to make lists on my phone because it's convenient. I can easily open the notes app and check my tasks anytime, whereas writing on paper feels less practical to me.

× Unfortunately there I don't.

✓ Unfortunately, I don't.

The phrase 'there I don't' is incorrect because 'there' is unnecessary and misplaced. The correct structure is simply 'I don't' to express negation. 'There' is used to indicate existence, which is not the case here.

× Aye. Loved buying things that I find interesting like attractive and then.

✓ I love buying things that I find interesting and attractive.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks a clear subject and verb. 'Aye' is informal and unclear here. The corrected sentence combines the ideas into a complete, grammatically correct sentence with proper conjunctions.

× Without hesitation.

✓ I do it without hesitation.

'Without hesitation' is a sentence fragment lacking a subject and verb. Adding 'I do it' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.

× I arranged them in the order I want.

✓ I arrange them in the order I want.

The verb 'arranged' is past tense, but the sentence context requires present tense to match 'I want'. Consistent tense usage improves clarity.

× In. For sure maybe that it works, it helped me too. Control. The. Piece of that book. In everything around them.

✓ For sure, maybe it works; it has helped me to control everything around me.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. The correction combines ideas into coherent sentences with proper punctuation and pronoun usage.

× They just like to do everything spontaneously an not in order so that they could enjoy their freedom.

✓ They just like to do everything spontaneously and not in order so that they can enjoy their freedom.

The conjunction 'an' is incorrect; it should be 'and'. Also, 'could' is changed to 'can' to express present ability, matching the context.

× In don't have to. And I have to be. In the.

✓ I don't have to, but I have to be organized.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains incorrect pronouns and incomplete thoughts. The correction provides a complete sentence with proper pronoun usage.

× I just need. I just need to find the notes app on phone aim.

✓ I just need to find the notes app on my phone.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains an unclear word 'aim'. The correction combines the fragments and clarifies the object with the possessive pronoun 'my'.

× Find all the things I need to do on that day.

✓ I find all the things I need to do on that day.

The original sentence is a fragment lacking a subject. Adding 'I' completes the sentence.

× But when I. Write the raw them on paper.

✓ But when I write them down on paper,

The phrase 'write the raw them' is incorrect and unclear. The correction uses 'write them down' which is the correct expression for recording items on paper.

× It's kinda annoying.

✓ It's kind of annoying.

'Kinda' is informal slang. The formal and grammatically correct phrase is 'kind of'.