List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不够自然。建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免重复，并使用正确的句子结构。例如，可以先直接回答问题，然后用一两句具体说明原因。

例: I don't usually make a shopping list because I enjoy choosing things spontaneously. For example, if I see something beautiful, I like to buy it right away, which makes shopping more fun and relaxing for me.

提案: 回答中有语法和表达不清的问题，且句子不完整。建议先直接回答问题，然后用具体例子支持，并注意句子完整和连贯。

例: Yes, I always make a list for my work because my major is fashion design. For example, when I create a portfolio project, I write down all the steps I need to complete. This helps me stay organized and finish my work on time.

提案: 回答不清晰且语法错误较多。建议先明确表达观点，然后用具体原因或例子支持，注意句子结构和逻辑连贯。

例: Some people don't like making lists because they feel it limits their memory. They prefer to remember things naturally, and making a list might make them feel less flexible or creative.

提案: 回答表达混乱且不完整。建议先直接回答偏好，然后说明原因，使用连贯的句子和适当的连接词。

例: I prefer to make lists on paper when I work because it's easier to write and see everything. However, if I don't have paper, I use my phone to make a list, especially for quick reminders.

× I do not like to make a shopping list because I enjoy the freedom to choose choose something spontaneously.

✓ I do not like to make a shopping list because I enjoy the freedom to choose something spontaneously.

The repetition of the word 'choose' is a typographical error and should be corrected to a single 'choose' to maintain sentence clarity and grammatical correctness.

× When I see something I like or find beautiful, I can quickly buy it without being reached it by at least this way scharping feeling more fun and relaxed it for me.

✓ When I see something I like or find beautiful, I can quickly buy it without hesitation; this way shopping feels more fun and relaxing for me.

The original sentence is confusing and contains incorrect phrases such as 'being reached it' and 'scharping feeling'. The correction restructures the sentence for clarity and grammatical correctness, replacing unclear phrases with appropriate expressions.

× Oh yes, I always make a list when I work, especially because my major is fishing design.

✓ Oh yes, I always make a list when I work, especially because my major is fashion design.

The phrase 'fishing design' is likely a typographical error for 'fashion design'. Correcting this improves the sentence's meaning and clarity.

× For example, when I I have to create a portfolio project, I write down all the steps in I needed to complete this.

✓ For example, when I have to create a portfolio project, I write down all the steps I need to complete it.

The sentence contains repeated words and incorrect tense usage. Removing the duplicate 'I' and correcting 'needed' to 'need' aligns the sentence with present tense and improves clarity.

× Help me stay organized and ensure I do.

✓ This helps me stay organized and ensures I complete my work.

The original sentence is a fragment lacking a clear subject. Adding 'This' as the subject and completing the sentence improves grammatical correctness and clarity.

× I think maybe make a list the can.

✓ I think maybe making a list can...

The phrase is incomplete and incorrectly structured. Changing 'make' to 'making' forms a gerund phrase, which is appropriate here.

× I'll make people remember everything and that can clearly do something like if you not have the list for some people to say there were this disorder their mind.

✓ It helps people remember everything clearly, but if you don't have a list, some people might say their mind feels disorganized.

The original sentence is confusing and grammatically incorrect. The correction clarifies the meaning and corrects verb forms and sentence structure.

× Actually, I always do boast that because when I when I work, I always.

✓ Actually, I always do that because when I work, I always...

The phrase 'do boast that' is incorrect in this context. Removing 'boast' and correcting the repetition improves sentence clarity.

× Make a list of all my paper but if I not had the paper when I shared.

✓ I make a list on paper, but if I don't have paper when I go out, I use my phone.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains incorrect verb forms. The correction provides a complete and grammatically correct sentence.

× But when I'm sure they remember something I will use phone.

✓ But when I'm sure I remember something, I will use my phone.

The original sentence has unclear pronoun reference and missing articles. The correction clarifies the subject and adds the possessive pronoun 'my' before 'phone'.