List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but has some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to make your sentences clearer and more concise, and avoid repeating similar ideas. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I always make a list when I shop because it helps me stay organized and avoid buying unnecessary items, which saves money. Additionally, having a list keeps me focused and efficient during shopping.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Work on sentence structure and grammar to express your ideas clearly. Use linking words like 'therefore' or 'thus' to connect your points logically. Also, complete your thoughts fully.

例: Yes, I make lists for my work because I like to stay organized. Making a list helps me prioritize tasks and work efficiently. Therefore, I can complete my work on time and reduce stress.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but is fragmented and lacks fluency. Try to use complete sentences and linking words such as 'however' or 'on the other hand' to contrast ideas. Also, avoid hesitations and unclear phrases.

例: It depends on the person. For example, I like to be organized and always make lists. However, some people prefer a flexible approach and do not like making lists because they want to do things spontaneously without stress.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains errors and incomplete thoughts. Improve your grammar and sentence structure. Use linking words like 'however' and 'therefore' properly. Also, clarify your ideas fully and avoid confusing phrases.

例: I prefer to make lists on paper because it is easily accessible and I can quickly jot down my thoughts. However, making lists on my phone is also useful since it provides reminders. Therefore, I usually choose paper lists for convenience.

× Yes I definitely make a list becauses it keeps me organized while I'm shopping or while I'm at work.

✓ Yes, I definitely make a list because it keeps me organized while I'm shopping or while I'm at work.

The word 'becauses' is incorrect; the correct conjunction is 'because'. This is a common spelling error. Also, a comma is needed after 'Yes' to separate the introductory word from the main clause.

× It prohibits me from buying unnecessary things. On which I spend a lot of money and the work list helps me too.

✓ It prevents me from buying unnecessary things on which I would spend a lot of money, and the work list helps me too.

The phrase 'On which I spend a lot of money' is incorrectly separated and lacks clarity. It should be connected to the previous sentence to explain what 'unnecessary things' refers to. Also, 'prohibits' is better replaced with 'prevents' in this context. The sentence structure is improved by combining the ideas properly.

× I am a person who likes to be organized and focus has.

✓ I am a person who likes to be organized and focused.

The phrase 'focus has' is incorrect. The correct adjective form is 'focused' to describe the person's state. This is an incorrect use of pronouns and adjectives.

× Making a list is a thing which. I always keep in mind to do.

✓ Making a list is something I always keep in mind to do.

The original sentence is fragmented and incorrectly structured. 'Which' is misplaced and the sentence should be combined into a single coherent sentence.

× It helps me to prioritize my task and work efficiently according to the points jotted down on the list by me.

✓ It helps me to prioritize my tasks and work efficiently according to the points I have jotted down on the list.

The word 'task' should be plural 'tasks' to match the context. Also, 'by me' is awkward; 'I have jotted down' is clearer and more natural. This corrects pronoun and plural usage.

× Moreover, it also saves my.

✓ Moreover, it also saves my time.

The sentence is incomplete; the object of 'saves my' is missing. Adding 'time' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.

× It depends from person to person.

✓ It depends on the person.

The correct preposition after 'depends' is 'on', not 'from'. Also, 'person to person' is better expressed as 'the person' in this context.

× Like a person like me who likes to be organized and focus always makes a list whereas the person who.

✓ A person like me who likes to be organized and focused always makes a list, whereas a person who

The phrase 'focus always makes a list' is incorrect; 'focused' is the correct adjective. Also, the sentence is incomplete and needs to be connected properly.

× Want a flexible approach? Do not prefer to make a list, they go on.

✓ Who want a flexible approach do not prefer to make a list; they go on

The sentence is fragmented and incorrectly structured. It should be combined into a relative clause to make sense.

× Just. Whatever they want to do as according to their own world without being stressful about.

✓ Just do whatever they want according to their own world without being stressed about it.

The original sentence is fragmented and ungrammatical. It needs to be combined and corrected for proper verb forms and prepositions.

× I like to make a list on a paper because it is easily accessible and I can write it down whatever there is on my mind.

✓ I like to make a list on paper because it is easily accessible and I can write down whatever is on my mind.

The article 'a' before 'paper' is incorrect; 'on paper' is the correct phrase. Also, 'write it down whatever there is' is awkward; 'write down whatever is' is better.

× However, making list on a four is also beneficial because it gives a reminder.

✓ However, making a list on a phone is also beneficial because it gives a reminder.

The phrase 'making list on a four' is incorrect. It should be 'making a list on a phone'. The word 'four' is likely a mishearing or typo for 'phone'. Also, 'making list' needs the article 'a'.

× 2A. B. Hence. I prefer to make a list on a paper.

✓ Hence, I prefer to make a list on paper.

The phrase '2A. B.' is unclear and unnecessary. Also, 'on a paper' should be 'on paper'. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammar.