Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 简化句子结构，修正语法并增加连接词，使表达更自然流畅。例如注意动词时态、冠词和介词的使用，避免重复表达“feel”。可以把原因分成主句和1-2个支持句，用连词如“because”或“so”。

例: Yes, I enjoy singing. I often sing with friends because it helps me relax and forget my stress, so I feel much happier in my free time.

提案: 回答直接但有重复，改进应更简洁并提供具体细节或替代方法（例如自学或未来计划）。避免口头禅如“MMM”，用连词连接原因。

例: No, I haven't taken formal singing lessons because I don't have enough time or money right now, but I practise singing at home and I hope to join a class in the future.

提案: 注意语法和措辞（例如“get the cancer”应改为“has cancer”），使句子简洁并具体说明想唱什么类型的歌或场合，表达关怀时使用自然的短语。

例: I would like to sing for my grandfather because he has cancer. I hope a gentle, familiar song could lift his spirits and make his day a little brighter.

提案: 内容混乱且重复，要先给主题句表达观点，然后用一两句清楚的理由支持。使用更准确的词汇和句子结构，避免重复“happy”。举例说明效果会更有说服力。

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness. For example, a cheerful song can lift someone's mood and reduce stress, especially when it's sung by a friend or loved one.

提案: 意思不清楚且语法错误（“seeing to others”无意义）。应直接回答并解释原因，说明是否喜欢听别人唱歌或更喜欢自己唱，给出具体场合或例子。

例: I enjoy both, but I prefer singing myself because it helps me express my emotions. However, I also appreciate listening to talented singers at concerts or online.

提案: 类似之前问题，删去“MMM”，避免重复，提供更多信息（比如是否尝试自学或将来的计划），并用连词使句子更自然。

例: No, I haven't taken a singing class due to time and financial constraints, but I practise online tutorials and hope to enrol in a class when I can.

× I like singing because when I singing with my friend I always feel relaxed and I can forget my stress and I can feel happy in my own free time.

✓ I like singing because when I sing with my friend I always feel relaxed, forget my stress, and feel happy in my free time.

原句中“when I singing”不正确，动词应为原形“sing”而不是动名词“singing”；此外句中多次使用“I can”显得冗余，可省略以使句子更自然。建议学习动词在情态或助动词后以及时间连词（when）后使用原形或适当时态，并去掉多余的助动词以提高流畅度。

× MMM, in my case the answer is no, because I think I don't have enough time to learn how to sing and I don't have enough money to spend on this.

✓ MMM, in my case the answer is no, because I don't have enough time to learn how to sing and I don't have enough money to spend on it.

原句时态总体正确，但最后的代词搭配不当，英语中常用“spend money on something”，此处用“it”指代“learn how to sing”。建议在类似结构中使用正确的代词指代前文内容，句子更简洁自然。

× Now that's because my grandfather get the cancer so I want to sing for him.

✓ That's because my grandfather has cancer, so I want to sing for him.

原句“my grandfather get the cancer”主谓不一致且用法不自然。正确表达为“has cancer”或“got cancer”。同时不需要冠词“the”在此短语中。建议注意主语为第三人称单数时动词搭配（has），以及固定搭配“have/has cancer”而非“get the cancer”。

× I hope he can feel more happy and don't feel uncomfortable and have a good day a lot.

✓ I hope he can feel happier, not feel uncomfortable, and have many good days.

原句中“more happy”在比较级中通常用“happier”；“don't feel uncomfortable”与主句人称一致应使用“doesn't”但在这里改为不带否定助动词的并列短语更自然；“have a good day a lot”不地道，应改为“have many good days”或“have a good day often”。建议学习比较级形式和更自然的副词短语表达。

× Absolutely yes, because I think the matter you are seeing for someone or who sing to you the person who always feel happy because I think singing can let people can have a lot of happy mood without stress.

✓ Absolutely yes, because when someone sings for you, you often feel happy; singing can put people in a happy, stress-free mood.

原句结构混乱，句子缺乏清晰的主谓关系且有重复（“can let people can”）。需重组为两个并列句：先说明“when someone sings for you, you feel happy”，再说明“singing creates a happy, stress-free mood”。建议写复合句时先确定主句与从句的关系，避免重复助动词，并使用自然的短语如“stress-free mood”。

× In my case, I prefer seeing to others more than listen to others singing because I like to sing to everyone.

✓ In my case, I prefer watching others to listening to their singing because I like to sing for everyone.

原句中“prefer seeing to others more than listen to others singing”中介词和结构错误。英语中“prefer A to B”结构后接动名词或不定式要一致，应为“prefer watching others to listening to their singing”。另外“sing to everyone”更自然为“sing for everyone”。建议使用一致的平行结构，并注意介词搭配（prefer ... to ...）。

× MMM, in my case the answer is no, because I don't have enough time to take a singing class and I don't have enough money to spend on this class.

✓ MMM, in my case the answer is no, because I don't have enough time to take a singing class and I don't have enough money to pay for one.

时态本身正确，但词组“spend on this class”不如“pay for one”自然。建议使用更地道的表达如“pay for a class”或“pay for one”以避免重复并使语言更简洁。