Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "I prefer singing alone" repeated). Pronunciation and fluency need slight improvement to sound confident.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing, especially rock songs. However, I usually sing alone because my friends often say my voice is not very good, so I feel more comfortable practicing by myself at karaoke.

提案: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then link to the piano experience as a related skill. Use linking words like "however" or "instead" and avoid unfinished sentences. Be specific about when or what you learned.

例: No, I haven't taken singing lessons. Instead, my parents enrolled me in piano lessons when I was young, and I learned to play some quite difficult pieces, which helped me understand music better.

提案: Be direct and avoid repeating phrases. Give one clear reason and a brief supporting detail. Use linking words like "because" and finish your thought—don’t leave sentence fragments.

例: I don't really sing for others because I feel self-conscious about my voice. Therefore I prefer singing alone at karaoke, where I can enjoy rock songs without worrying about an audience.

提案: Provide a fuller, well-linked response: start with a clear opinion, then give two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid trailing off and use precise vocabulary (e.g., "lift my mood").

例: Yes, I think singing brings happiness. For example, upbeat pop songs lift my mood, and when I'm upset I often sing or listen to music to relax and feel better.

提案: Clarify and correct vocabulary mistakes ("boating" should be "hearing" or "listening to"). Give one or two clear reasons and avoid unfinished sentences. Use linking words like "especially" and "because."

例: Yes, I love listening to others sing, especially at live concerts by rock bands, because their energy motivates me and usually makes me feel happier.

提案: Good direct answer and relevant detail. Improve coherence by using consistent tenses and a linking word like "however" to contrast singing vs piano. Keep it to two or three sentences max.

例: No, I haven't taken singing classes; however, my parents enrolled me in piano lessons instead. Learning piano helped me relieve stress and improved my concentration.

× I like singing but my friends, they usually tell me that my voice is not good, so I prefer singing alone and I like to go to karaoke by myself.

✓ I like singing, but my friends usually tell me that my voice is not good, so I prefer singing alone and going to karaoke by myself.

The extra pronoun 'they' is unnecessary and causes redundancy. Also maintain parallel form: 'prefer singing alone and going to karaoke' uses gerunds consistently. Suggest removing the redundant pronoun and use parallel gerunds. ID:12

× I actually love rock songs.

✓ I actually love rock songs.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed; it expresses a general preference correctly. ID:22

× No, but my parents sent me to learn piano lessons.

✓ No, but my parents sent me to take piano lessons.

The verb collocation is 'take lessons' not 'learn lessons.' Use the base verb 'take' with plural 'piano lessons.' The original misuses 'learn' with 'lessons.' ID:9

× I enjoy learning pianos because it was very interesting and fun.

✓ I enjoyed learning the piano because it was very interesting and fun.

Use 'the piano' to refer to the instrument in general and match past tense 'enjoyed' with 'was.' Also 'learning pianos' is incorrect; 'learning the piano' is idiomatic. ID:22

× I could play difficult songs.

✓ I could play difficult songs.

The sentence is acceptable as a past ability statement. No change required. ID:5

× But right now?

✓ But what about now?

'But right now?' is fragmentary and unclear. Use 'But what about now?' to form a complete question asking about the present situation. ID:26

× Actually, I don't want to sing for anyone because I think that my voice is not good for singing to someone.

✓ Actually, I don't want to sing for anyone because I think my voice is not good enough to sing for someone.

'Good for singing to someone' is awkward. Use 'good enough to sing for someone.' This corrects pronoun/preposition awkwardness and improves clarity. ID:12

× Actually I prefer to sing alone and often go to karaoke by myself.

✓ Actually, I prefer to sing alone and often go to karaoke by myself.

Add comma after introductory 'Actually' for clarity. The sentence is otherwise fine and consistent. ID:12

× I enjoy singing rock songs and also.

✓ I enjoy singing rock songs as well.

'And also' at the end is incomplete. Use 'as well' to complete the thought and avoid an unfinished sentence. ID:26

× Yes definitely. When I listen to happy songs and pop songs I usually get my mood better.

✓ Yes, definitely. When I listen to happy and pop songs, my mood usually improves.

Use 'my mood improves' rather than 'get my mood better.' 'Get my mood better' is ungrammatical; 'improves' fits subject-verb structure and present simple usage for habitual actions. Add commas for readability. ID:6

× Umm. Besides that when I have a bad mood I usually go for.

✓ When I am in a bad mood, I usually go out (or go to karaoke) to cheer myself up.

'Go for' is incomplete; the sentence needs an object or clearer phrase. Provide complete options like 'go out' or 'go to karaoke' to convey intended meaning and add commas. Use 'am in a bad mood' for natural phrasing. ID:26

× I enjoy boating rock music and I always listen to motivate that songs because I usually feel better and.

✓ I enjoy listening to rock music live, and I always listen to motivational songs because they usually make me feel better.

Original has multiple errors: 'boating rock music' is incorrect (likely 'going to' or 'listening to' live rock music), 'listen to motivate that songs' is ungrammatical. Use 'motivational songs' and 'they make me feel better.' Remove trailing 'and' and complete the sentence. ID:13

× Yes, I love going to live concerts, especially rock bands.

✓ Yes, I love going to live concerts, especially to see rock bands.

Add 'to see' to clarify the relationship between going to concerts and rock bands. 'Especially rock bands' is understandable but adding 'to see' completes the structure. ID:10

× No, I've never taken a singing class, but my parents sent me to take piano lessons instead.

✓ No, I've never taken a singing class, but my parents sent me to take piano lessons instead.

This sentence is grammatically correct; 'have never taken' and 'sent me to take' are appropriate. No change needed. ID:9

× I enjoyed learning piano because it helped me relieve my stress and helps me concentrate better.

✓ I enjoyed learning the piano because it helped me relieve stress and helped me concentrate better.

Maintain past tense consistently: 'enjoyed' and 'helped' should both be past. Also use 'the piano' and remove 'my' before 'stress' for natural phrasing. ID:6