Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct grammar (e.g. "in my free time," "when I'm home alone"), and limit to 3–4 sentences. Add one specific detail about why you like singing (emotion, hobby, or purpose).

例: Yes, I love singing. I often sing in my free time or when I am home alone because it helps me relax and lift my mood. I especially enjoy singing English pop songs, as I like their melodies and clear lyrics.

提案: Provide a clearer, grammatically correct answer: say whether you had formal lessons or self-taught, and give a specific example with a time reference. Use linking words to show progression (e.g. "when I was a child," "lately").

例: Yes, I have taught myself to sing rather than taking formal lessons. When I was a child I used to try writing simple melodies and practising them, and recently I learn new songs from YouTube to improve my technique.

提案: Give a concise reason and one concrete example. Correct grammar ("my mother" or "my mom","hard work"). Avoid repeating phrases and use linking words like "because" or "for example."

例: I would love to sing for my mother because she works very hard and I want to make her happy. For example, I often sing to her while we do chores together to cheer her up.

提案: Be specific and realistic. Start with a clear opinion, then give two concise reasons with examples. Avoid exaggerated or unclear figures and correct grammar. Use linking words like "because" and "for example."

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness because it lifts people's spirits and helps them express emotions. It can also open career opportunities for talented singers; for example, popular artists can earn a living from concerts and streaming.

提案: Remove fillers (uh, like) and give a clear statement plus a specific detail about whose singing you enjoy and why. Use correct vocabulary ("singing," "songs") and one linking word to expand.

例: Yes, I enjoy listening to other people sing, especially my sister. Her voice is very expressive and she sings Hindi songs beautifully, so I often listen to her performances for inspiration.

提案: Answer directly then expand with a brief reason and plan. Use correct tense and prepositions ("so far," "on YouTube"). Give a specific future plan and example of what you learn from listening to artists.

例: No, I haven't taken any singing classes so far, but I would like to in the future to improve my technique. For now I learn by listening to artists like Billie Eilish on YouTube and practicing their songs to study phrasing and tone.

× I definitely love singing.

✓ I definitely love singing.

No change needed; sentence correctly uses present tense to express a general preference.

× I usually sing in my free times or whenever I I am bored in home alone.

✓ I usually sing in my free time or whenever I am bored and home alone.

'Free times' is incorrect; 'free time' is the uncountable noun for spare time. Remove the duplicated 'I'. Use 'and' to link 'bored' and 'home alone' for clarity.

× I love to sing in like English songs.

✓ I love to sing English songs.

Avoid 'in' and filler 'like' here. Use direct object 'English songs' after 'sing'.

× I'm addictive to the English songs.

✓ I'm addicted to English songs.

Use the adjective 'addicted' (past participle) not 'addictive' (which describes something that causes addiction). Omit the definite article before 'English songs' unless referring to specific songs.

× Yes, I definitely learn new musics like upcoming musics.

✓ Yes, I definitely learn new music, such as upcoming songs.

'Music' is uncountable; 'musics' is incorrect. Use 'songs' for countable items. 'Upcoming' modifies 'songs'. Present simple 'learn' is acceptable if referring to habitual action; if referring to past, use 'learned' or 'have learned'.

× I give focus on those musics and I have practice even in my child by writing the music.

✓ I focus on those songs and I have practiced since childhood by writing music.

Use 'focus on' rather than 'give focus on'. Replace 'musics' with 'songs' or 'music'. 'I have practiced since childhood' expresses ongoing past-to-present action. 'By writing music' clarifies how practice occurred.

× I would definitely love to sing for my mom because she does the hard works and I would definitely love to sing in front of her and I usually love to sing in front of my mother's while doing our work activities.

✓ I would love to sing for my mom because she works very hard, and I often sing in front of her while we do our chores.

'Does the hard works' is ungrammatical; use 'works very hard'. Avoid repeating 'I would definitely love'. 'In front of my mother's' is incorrect possessive; use 'in front of her'. 'Work activities' is better phrased as 'chores'.

× Of course our singing has like many benefits too and it has also like it.

✓ Of course singing has many benefits, and it can bring happiness.

Removing 'our' makes the sentence more general unless student means their own singing. Remove filler 'like' and the redundant 'it has also like it', instead state the effect clearly.

× Singing can also give focus on our career because nowadays there are many artists earning like 1,000,000 billions and singing has like great opportunity for best voice.

✓ Singing can also help a career because nowadays many artists earn large amounts of money, and singing can provide opportunities for those with strong voices.

'Give focus on our career' is unnatural; 'help a career' or 'help your career' works. '1,000,000 billions' is incorrect and unrealistic. Use 'large amounts of money' or specific figures. Remove filler 'like' and rephrase 'great opportunity for best voice' to 'provide opportunities for those with strong voices'.

× Uh, yes, uh, I have seen my sister's singlings.

✓ Yes, I have heard my sister singing.

'Seen' is incorrect for hearing voice; use 'heard'. 'Sister's singlings' is ungrammatical: 'sister singing' or 'my sister's singing' are correct. Avoid fillers 'uh'.

× Her voice is like very uh, fluent and very deep voice in high notes.

✓ Her voice is very fluent and can reach high, deep notes.

Avoid duplicating 'voice'. 'Fluent' is odd for singing; consider 'smooth' or 'clear'. 'Very deep voice in high notes' is contradictory; clarify that she has a smooth tone and can sing high notes clearly.

× Uh, I love to sing, I love to listen singing on her musics, like in basically Hindi musics.

✓ I love to sing, and I love listening to her music, especially Hindi songs.

Use 'listening to' not 'listen singing on'. Replace 'her musics' with 'her music'. 'Basically' is filler; use 'especially' to emphasize Hindi songs.

× No I haven't taken any classes till the now but I would definitely love to join class in the future.

✓ No, I haven't taken any classes until now, but I would definitely love to join a class in the future.

Use 'until now' instead of 'till the now'. Add article 'a' before 'class'. Present perfect 'haven't taken' is correct for experiences up to now.

× Now I'm just listening music from through the youtubes like English songs, Billie Eilish which I loved recently and I usually listen her musics.

✓ Now I'm just listening to music on YouTube, like English songs and Billie Eilish, whom I have liked recently, and I usually listen to her music.

Use 'listening to music' and 'on YouTube'. 'The youtubes' is incorrect. For people use 'whom' or restructure: 'Billie Eilish, whom I have enjoyed recently'. Use 'listen to her music'. 'Musics' is incorrect.