Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答がやや不明瞭で文法や語彙の誤用が見られます。まず冒頭で明確にトピックセンテンスを述べ、その理由を一つか二つの具体的な詳細で支えましょう。不要なフィラー（"MMM", "a lot of J pop musics"）は避け、正しい語順と単数/複数形を使って簡潔に答える練習をしてください。例えば「リフレッシュできる」「友達とカラオケに行く」など具体的な状況を付け加えると良いです。発話は1〜3文に収め、つながりを出すために接続詞（because, so, and）を使ってください。

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax after a busy day. I often go to karaoke with my friends, and we usually sing popular J-pop songs together.

提案: 意味が伝わりにくく、混乱する表現（"learned how to think"、"I won't know how to think"）が含まれます。まず直接的に「習ったことがない」と述べ、その後で補足としていつ少し学んだか（学校での経験）を明確に説明しましょう。過去形と現在形を混同しないように注意し、簡潔な文で情報を整理してください。不要な繰り返し（"no, no"）も避けましょう。

例: No, I have never had formal singing lessons. When I was in elementary school, we had some basic music classes, but they were not professional lessons.

提案: 質問の意図（誰のために歌いたいか）に直接答えていません。まず明確に対象を述べ（e.g. friends, family）、次に理由を具体的に説明しましょう。文法ミス（"who likes the music same as me", "a song what I really like"）を訂正し、文を短くまとめて結論をはっきり示してください。曖昧な中断（"so if I Yeah, when I."）は避け、論理的な流れを保ちましょう。

例: I would like to sing for my close friends because they share the same taste in music. I usually choose songs I really enjoy so they can appreciate them with me.

提案: 答えは肯定していますが、同じ表現を繰り返し過ぎて簡潔さに欠けます。理由を一つか二つの具体例（例えばストレス軽減、社交の場の提供）で示し、接続詞でつなげて論理的に説明してください。冗長な"I think"の乱用や曖昧な語（"recently is more happiness"）を避け、明確な因果関係を示しましょう。

例: Yes, I believe singing can make people happier because it reduces stress and creates a shared social experience. For example, singing together at a karaoke night can lift everyone's mood and strengthen friendships.

× I like singing because I can't refresh when I sing a song.

✓ I like singing because I can't relax when I sing a song.

The verb 'refresh' is incorrectly used; in this context the correct verb is 'relax' or 'feel refreshed'. Use 'relax' to express becoming calmer. Suggestion: say 'I can't relax when I sing' or 'I feel refreshed when I sing' depending on intended meaning.

× I usually go to karaoke with my friends and we sing a lot of J pop musics.

✓ I usually go to karaoke with my friends and we sing a lot of J-pop songs.

The noun 'music' is uncountable and should not be pluralized as 'musics'. Use 'songs' to count individual pieces, and hyphenate 'J-pop'. Suggestion: use 'a lot of J-pop songs' or 'a lot of J-pop music'.

× Actually, no, no, I have not ever learned how to sing.

✓ Actually, no, I have never learned how to sing.

The present perfect negative is expressed as 'have never' rather than 'have not ever' in natural spoken English; both are grammatical but 'never' is more idiomatic. Also avoid repeating 'no'. Suggestion: say 'Actually, no, I have never learned how to sing.'

× I just learned how to think when I was a elementary school student, but it was not a professional teaching, so I have not.

✓ I just learned how to sing when I was an elementary school student, but it was not professional teaching, so I did not learn properly.

Multiple errors: 'think' should be 'sing' (wrong verb), 'a elementary' should be 'an elementary' (article before vowel sound), and 'professional teaching' is awkward; use 'professional instruction' or 'professional lessons'. The ending 'so I have not' is incomplete; use 'so I did not learn properly' or 'so I never had formal training.' Suggestion: 'I learned a little to sing when I was an elementary school student, but it wasn't professional instruction, so I never had formal training.'

× But I won't know how to think.

✓ But I don't know how to sing.

The original mixes wrong modal tense and wrong verb. 'Won't know' (future negative) is incorrect; the speaker means present lack of ability: 'I don't know'. 'Think' should be 'sing'. Suggestion: use present tense 'I don't know how to sing.'

× It's a difficult question. I want to thank for my friends who likes the music same as me.

✓ It's a difficult question. I want to thank my friends who like the same music as I do.

Errors: 'thank for my friends' should be 'thank my friends' (no 'for'), subject-verb agreement 'who likes' should be 'who like', and word order 'the music same as me' should be 'the same music as I do' or 'who like the same music I do.' Suggestion: 'I want to thank my friends who like the same music I do.'

× I usually sing a song what I really like, so if I Yeah, when I.

✓ I usually sing songs that I really like.

This fragment contains several errors: 'a song what I really like' should be 'songs that I really like' or 'a song that I really like'. The rest 'so if I Yeah, when I.' is incomplete and should be omitted. Suggestion: keep it simple: 'I usually sing songs that I really like.'

× This is because I think music has a big power to encourage people.

✓ This is because I think music has great power to encourage people.

The phrase 'a big power' is unnatural; use 'great power' or 'a lot of power'. 'Has great power' is a more idiomatic collocation. Suggestion: 'music has great power to encourage people.'

× So umm, actually I think recently is more happiness to people.

✓ So, actually I think recently people have been happier.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and awkward phrasing. Use present perfect continuous or present perfect passive to describe recent change: 'people have been happier recently.' Suggestion: 'I think people have been happier recently.'