Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Votre réponse est naturelle et montre une bonne expression personnelle, mais elle contient des hésitations et des répétitions inutiles. Pour améliorer, essayez de structurer votre réponse avec une phrase principale claire, suivie de détails spécifiques, et évitez les mots comme "umm" qui interrompent la fluidité.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because I have a good voice, as my friends and family often say. Singing allows me to express my emotions deeply and connect with the song's meaning.

提案: Votre réponse manque de fluidité à cause des nombreuses hésitations et de la structure un peu confuse. Pour améliorer, répondez directement à la question avec une phrase claire, puis ajoutez des détails pertinents en utilisant des mots de liaison pour la cohérence.

例: No, I have never learned to sing professionally, although it was a childhood ambition. However, I did learn to play the guitar when I was about 12 years old, which helped me appreciate music more.

提案: Votre réponse est pertinente mais contient des hésitations et pourrait être plus concise. Pour améliorer, formulez une phrase principale claire et utilisez des détails spécifiques pour expliquer vos préférences, en évitant les répétitions.

例: I usually sing alone in my bedroom or bathroom, but sometimes I like to sing for my mom and friends because I enjoy their compliments and support.

提案: Votre réponse est bonne mais contient des hésitations et une structure un peu répétitive. Pour améliorer, exprimez votre opinion clairement, puis donnez des exemples précis en utilisant des mots de liaison pour une meilleure cohérence.

例: I believe singing brings happiness because it allows people to immerse themselves in emotions. For example, singing joyful, sad, or romantic songs can help express and release feelings.

× I really enjoy when I sing because I feel that I'm into the song and full of emotions.

✓ I really enjoy singing because I feel that I'm into the song and full of emotions.

The verb 'enjoy' should be followed by a gerund (-ing form) rather than 'when' plus a clause. Using 'enjoy singing' is grammatically correct.

× But I have learned, uh, how to play with the guitar when I was, I think 12 years old.

✓ But I learned how to play the guitar when I was, I think, 12 years old.

The past simple tense 'learned' is more appropriate here than present perfect 'have learned' because the action happened at a specific time in the past. Also, 'play with the guitar' should be 'play the guitar'.

× But I have learned, uh, how to play with the guitar when I was, I think 12 years old.

✓ But I learned how to play the guitar when I was, I think, 12 years old.

The phrase 'play with the guitar' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'play the guitar' without 'with'.

× I believe that singing can be a key of happiness, uh, because people can feel immersed in the song and full of emotions, especially when it is, uh, sad songs or uh, joy songs or romantic songs.

✓ I believe that singing can be a key to happiness because people can feel immersed in the song and full of emotions, especially when it is sad songs or joyful songs or romantic songs.

The correct preposition after 'a key' is 'to' not 'of'. Also, 'joy songs' should be 'joyful songs' to use the correct adjective form.