Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Та илүү тодорхой, грамматик алдаагүй, логик холбоос ашиглан хариултаа сайжруулах хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, "I like singing because it reduces my stress and gives me more energy. Moreover, singing relaxes me and has improved my mental health." гэж хэлж болно.

例: I like singing because it reduces my stress and gives me more energy. Moreover, singing relaxes me and has improved my mental health.

提案: Хариултаа илүү тодорхой, грамматик алдаагүй, логик холбоос ашиглан сайжруулах хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, "Yes, I learned how to sing when I was in 9th grade. I practiced a lot for a singing competition at my school, which helped me improve my singing skills." гэж хэлж болно.

例: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was in 9th grade. I practiced a lot for a singing competition at my school, which helped me improve my singing skills.

提案: Хариултаа илүү тодорхой, грамматик алдаагүй, логик холбоос ашиглан сайжруулах хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, "I want to sing for my mom because she is the person I love the most. Singing a song for her would express all my feelings." гэж хэлж болно.

例: I want to sing for my mom because she is the person I love the most. Singing a song for her would express all my feelings.

提案: Хариултаа илүү тодорхой, грамматик алдаагүй, логик холбоос ашиглан сайжруулах хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, "Of course, singing can bring happiness to people because music is an important part of life. Without music and singing, life would be less joyful." гэж хэлж болно.

例: Of course, singing can bring happiness to people because music is an important part of life. Without music and singing, life would be less joyful.

× I like singing because it reduce my stress having more energy by the music.

✓ I like singing because it reduces my stress and gives me more energy through the music.

The verb 'reduce' should be in the third person singular form 'reduces' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also, the sentence structure is improved by adding 'and gives me' to connect ideas clearly.

× I love to sing because it's relax me all the time and has healed my mental health.

✓ I love to sing because it relaxes me all the time and has healed my mental health.

The pronoun 'it's' is a contraction of 'it is' and should be followed by a verb in third person singular form 'relaxes' to agree with 'it'. The verb 'relax' needs to be in third person singular form to match the subject.

× Is I learn how to sing.

✓ I learned how to sing.

The sentence structure is incorrect; 'Is I learn' is ungrammatical. The correct past tense form 'I learned how to sing' is appropriate here.

× When I was 9th grade and competition of singing in my school, I had a practice on singing and then I learned how to sing better in the in the chatter.

✓ When I was in 9th grade and participated in a singing competition at my school, I practiced singing and then learned how to sing better in the choir.

The sentence needed correction for prepositions ('in 9th grade'), verb forms ('participated'), and word choice ('choir' instead of 'chatter'). Also, 'had a practice on singing' is corrected to 'practiced singing' for natural expression.

× I was seeing for my mom the person I really loved and she's my only loved person in the world and I want to give her a song and I will sing to her for my whole feeling.

✓ I want to sing for my mom, the person I really love. She's the only person I love in the world, and I want to give her a song and sing to her with all my feelings.

'I was seeing for my mom' is incorrect; 'I want to sing for my mom' is appropriate. Also, 'loved' should be 'love' to express present feelings. 'For my whole feeling' is corrected to 'with all my feelings' for natural expression.

× Of course singing can bring happiness to person because it is the most the key of this in life.

✓ Of course, singing can bring happiness to a person because it is the key to life.

The phrase 'to person' needs the article 'a' to be correct. 'The most the key of this in life' is awkward and corrected to 'the key to life' for clarity and correctness.

× If we don't have a music and we can sing, we will die.

✓ If we don't have music and cannot sing, we will die.

'A music' is incorrect; 'music' is uncountable and does not need an article. Also, 'we can sing' contradicts the meaning; 'cannot sing' fits the intended meaning better.

× We're not a people, but we're out of the music and song, so it brings.

✓ We are not truly people without music and song; they bring us life.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. The correction clarifies the meaning and corrects sentence structure.