Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and has grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more natural and clear. For example, say "I like singing because it refreshes me and makes me feel calm whenever I listen to songs." Also, avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences.

例: I like singing because it refreshes my mind and makes me feel calm. Whenever I listen to songs, I feel relaxed and happy.

提案: Your answer has some repetition and grammatical mistakes. Try to say, "No, I have never learned to sing professionally, but I enjoy listening to music as it is my favorite pastime. I especially like singers such as Dasan Khan." This is clearer and more natural.

例: No, I have never taken singing lessons, but I enjoy listening to music in my free time. My favorite singer is Dasan Khan.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Try to complete your sentences and express your ideas clearly. For example, "My husband encourages me to sing, but due to my busy schedule, I don't have enough time to practice singing."

例: My husband encourages me to sing, but because I am very busy, I cannot find time to practice singing.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and is incomplete. Try to say, "Certainly, singing not only brings happiness to people but also helps build close relationships. Singing can motivate people, and listening to music refreshes us. So yes, singing has many benefits."

例: Certainly, singing brings happiness and helps people connect with each other. It motivates us, and listening to music refreshes our minds. Therefore, singing has many positive effects.

× Yes, I like singing because it gives us a refreshment and soothing feeling whenever we listen.

✓ Yes, I like singing because it gives us refreshment and a soothing feeling whenever we listen.

The word 'refreshment' is uncountable here, so 'a' should not be used before it. Also, 'soothing feeling' is countable and needs the article 'a'. So, the correct phrase is 'refreshment and a soothing feeling'. This improves the naturalness and correctness of the sentence.

× We listen any song, our mind diverse and.

✓ When we listen to any song, our mind diversifies and relaxes.

The original sentence lacks proper structure and prepositions. 'Listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by an object. Also, 'diverse' is an adjective, but the verb 'diversifies' fits better here. The sentence needs to be restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× No, unfortunately I didn't learn a song, but I always try to listen music because it's my favorite favorite pastime activities and I like singers such as Dasan Khan.

✓ No, unfortunately I haven't learned to sing, but I always try to listen to music because it's my favorite pastime activity and I like singers such as Dasan Khan.

The past tense 'didn't learn' is less appropriate here; present perfect 'haven't learned' fits better for experience. 'Learn a song' is incorrect; 'learn to sing' is correct. 'Listen music' requires the preposition 'to'. 'Favorite favorite pastime activities' is redundant and plural; 'favorite pastime activity' is correct.

× No, unfortunately I didn't learn a song, but I always try to listen music because it's my favorite favorite pastime activities and I like singers such as Dasan Khan.

✓ No, unfortunately I haven't learned to sing, but I always try to listen to music because it's my favorite pastime activity and I like singers such as Dasan Khan.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' before its object. Also, 'learn a song' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'learn to sing'. These corrections improve grammatical accuracy.

× My husband encouraged me to sing but uh, due to my lack of Due to my lack of time, I can't manage time for singing, but I.

✓ My husband encouraged me to sing, but due to my lack of time, I can't manage time for singing.

The sentence is incomplete and repetitive ('due to my lack of Due to my lack of time'). Removing redundancy and completing the sentence improves clarity and correctness.

× Certainly, singing not only bring happiness to people but also make close relationship among people.

✓ Certainly, singing not only brings happiness to people but also makes close relationships among people.

The subject 'singing' is singular, so the verbs should be 'brings' and 'makes' to agree in number. Also, 'relationship' should be plural 'relationships' to match the context.

× Through singing, people can motivate it and listening music can also refresh to us.

✓ Through singing, people can motivate themselves and listening to music can also refresh us.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect here; 'themselves' correctly refers back to 'people'. 'Listening music' requires the preposition 'to'. 'Refresh to us' is incorrect; 'refresh us' is correct.

× So yes, singing has a.

✓ So yes, singing has a positive effect.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks an object after 'has a'. Adding 'positive effect' completes the thought and makes the sentence grammatically correct.