Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like "my voice is not so beautiful to sing" and "there's nobody to enjoy my voice." Try to combine ideas smoothly and use more natural expressions.

例: No, I don't like singing because I don't think my voice sounds good, and I believe others wouldn't enjoy it either. However, I do enjoy listening to talented singers.

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some grammatical errors and repetition. Try to give a direct answer first, then explain your reason clearly and logically using linking words.

例: No, I have never learned how to sing because I don't have a pleasant singing voice, so I didn't feel it was necessary to take lessons.

提案: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Actually, I only like to sing children's songs for my kids because they really enjoy it, and it amuses them a lot.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and concise. Use simpler and clearer expressions, and avoid awkward phrases like "take you happiness."

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people of all ages because listening to beautiful songs can be very enjoyable and uplifting.

× No, I don't like singing because my voice is not so beautiful to sing and I think there's nobody to enjoy my voice.

✓ No, I don't like singing because my voice is not beautiful enough to sing, and I think nobody enjoys my voice.

The phrase 'not so beautiful to sing' is awkward; 'not beautiful enough to sing' is clearer. Also, 'there's nobody to enjoy my voice' is incorrect; it should be 'nobody enjoys my voice' to express that no one appreciates it.

× No, I have never learned how to sing because I wasn't interested in learning it when my I don't have a pleasant singing voice.

✓ No, I have never learned how to sing because I wasn't interested in learning it since I don't have a pleasant singing voice.

The sentence is fragmented and confusing. 'When my I don't have' is incorrect. Replacing 'when' with 'since' clarifies the reason, and the sentence becomes coherent.

× It's not. It's not necessary to learn how to sing.

✓ It's not necessary to learn how to sing.

The repetition 'It's not. It's not necessary' is redundant. The correct form is a single sentence stating 'It's not necessary to learn how to sing.'

× Actually, I'm just interested to sing the songs from the kids signs for my children because they love it.

✓ Actually, I'm just interested in singing the songs from the kids' signs for my children because they love them.

The correct phrase is 'interested in singing' not 'interested to sing.' Also, 'kids signs' should be 'kids' signs' to show possession, and 'they love it' should be 'they love them' referring to the songs.

× It can be amuse them a lot.

✓ It can amuse them a lot.

The verb 'amuse' should not be preceded by 'be' here. The correct form is 'It can amuse them a lot.'

× Yes, whether you are old or a teenager or a kid, listening to some great songs with pleasant singing voice can be so interesting for you and it can take you happiness.

✓ Yes, whether you are old, a teenager, or a kid, listening to some great songs with a pleasant singing voice can be very interesting for you and can bring you happiness.

The phrase 'pleasant singing voice' needs the article 'a' before it. Also, 'take you happiness' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'bring you happiness.' Additionally, commas improve clarity in the list.