Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법 오류가 있습니다. 또한, 내용이 중복되고 명확하지 않습니다. 간결하고 명확한 문장으로 자신의 감정을 표현하고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relieve stress from work. Even though I'm not very good at it, singing makes me feel happy and relaxed.

提案: 문법과 어휘 사용에 오류가 많고, 문장이 자연스럽지 않습니다. 과거 경험을 말할 때는 과거 시제를 정확히 사용하고, 문장을 간결하게 구성하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: Yes, I learned singing in high school when I took a music class. I really enjoyed it, but I want to improve my skills further.

提案: 문장이 길고 중복된 표현이 많으며, 문법 오류가 있습니다. 문장을 짧고 명확하게 만들고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: I want to sing for my grandma because she loves listening to songs. She often watches singing programs, so I want to sing her favorite songs.

提案: 문법과 표현이 부자연스럽고, 문장이 완성되지 않았습니다. 경험을 이야기할 때는 명확한 문장 구조를 사용하고, 감정을 구체적으로 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness. When I was young, I attended my favorite singer's concert for the first time, and her voice deeply moved me.

× Yes, I do really like when I'm singing because actually I'm not good with singing.

✓ Yes, I really like singing because actually I'm not good at singing.

'Like' is followed by a gerund (verb + -ing) when expressing enjoyment of an activity. 'Like when I'm singing' is awkward; 'like singing' is more natural. Also, 'good with singing' should be 'good at singing' because 'good at' is the correct preposition for skills.

× I'm not good with singing.

✓ I'm not good at singing.

The correct preposition to express skill is 'good at', not 'good with'. 'Good with' is used for handling objects or people.

× I feel really stressed by working or something else.

✓ I feel really stressed from working or other things.

The preposition 'by' is incorrect here; 'stressed from' or 'stressed because of' is appropriate to indicate the cause of stress.

× Yes I do. When I was high school at that time I was have musics subject.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was in high school, I had a music subject.

'I do' should be 'I did' to match past tense. 'Was have' is incorrect; 'had' is the past tense of 'have'. Also, 'musics subject' should be 'music subject'. 'When I was high school' needs 'in' before 'high school'.

× When I was high school at that time I was have musics subject.

✓ When I was in high school, I had a music subject.

The phrase 'when I was high school' requires the preposition 'in' to indicate being a student at that time.

× I was have musics subject.

✓ I had a music subject.

'Musics' is incorrect; 'music' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized here.

× When I joined that class I was really enjoy the music class.

✓ When I joined that class, I really enjoyed the music class.

'Was enjoy' is incorrect; the past tense of 'enjoy' is 'enjoyed'. The verb should be in past tense to match 'joined'.

× I want to sing for my grandma because my grandma really like listening singing so she watch the singing program a lot so I want to sing to her what she really want to listen.

✓ I want to sing for my grandma because she really likes listening to singing, so she watches singing programs a lot. I want to sing to her what she really wants to listen to.

Pronouns should be consistent and correct: 'my grandma' can be replaced with 'she' after first mention. 'Like' should be 'likes' for third person singular. 'Listening singing' should be 'listening to singing'. 'Watch' should be 'watches' for third person singular. 'Want' should be 'wants' for third person singular. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× my grandma really like listening singing

✓ my grandma really likes listening to singing

For third person singular subjects, verbs need an 's' at the end: 'like' becomes 'likes'. Also, 'listening singing' requires the preposition 'to'.

× she watch the singing program a lot

✓ she watches singing programs a lot

'She' requires the verb to be in third person singular form, so 'watch' becomes 'watches'. Also, 'program' is better pluralized as 'programs' here.

× I want to sing to her what she really want to listen.

✓ I want to sing to her what she really wants to listen to.

'She' requires 'wants' for third person singular. Also, the verb 'listen' is usually followed by the preposition 'to'.

× when I was young I saw my favorite singer on her concert.

✓ When I was young, I saw my favorite singer at her concert.

'On her concert' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'at' for events like concerts.

× I saw my favorite singer on her concert.

✓ I saw my favorite singer at her concert.

'On' is incorrect for events; 'at' is the correct preposition to indicate attendance at an event.

× It was my first time to watch concert when when I hear her voice I feel very touched and ha.

✓ It was my first time watching a concert. When I heard her voice, I felt very touched and happy.

The phrase 'first time to watch concert' is incorrect; 'first time watching a concert' is correct. 'When when' is a repetition error. 'Hear' and 'feel' should be in past tense 'heard' and 'felt' to match the past event. 'Ha' is unclear and replaced with 'happy'.