Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và cách sử dụng từ để tự nhiên hơn. Ví dụ, bạn nên dùng thì hiện tại đơn cho thói quen (I often listen to music) và tránh dùng các cụm từ không chính xác như "feeling with the melodies". Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh lặp lại ý.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax after a busy day. I often listen to music and appreciate the melodies, which makes me feel comfortable and eager to sing more.

提案: Bạn cần sử dụng ngữ pháp chính xác hơn và tránh dùng từ không phù hợp như "learned things" hay "simple task". Hãy dùng từ vựng liên quan đến hát và luyện tập. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc rõ ràng với câu chủ đề và câu bổ sung có liên kết logic.

例: I have never taken formal singing lessons, but I often practice singing with my friends at karaoke. I usually choose simple songs to sing, which helps me feel connected with them.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có lỗi ngữ pháp, ví dụ như sử dụng thì sai và câu không hoàn chỉnh. Bạn nên trình bày ý tưởng rõ ràng hơn, dùng câu hoàn chỉnh và tránh dùng các cụm từ mơ hồ như "make her feel and hopefully".

例: I want to sing for my mother because she is very dedicated and caring. I believe that music is a good way to show my love and make her feel appreciated.

提案: Bạn cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt để câu trả lời rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Tránh dùng các cụm từ không đúng ngữ cảnh như "think they will" hay "Or tonic with all the people". Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để kết nối ý và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể hơn.

例: I think singing brings happiness because it allows people to express their emotions. When they sing, they can relax and feel joyful, which helps them connect with others.

× I often listening to music and feeling with the melodies.

✓ I often listen to music and feel the melodies.

The verbs 'listening' and 'feeling' are incorrectly used in the present simple tense context. The correct form is the base verb 'listen' and 'feel' to match the subject 'I' and the adverb 'often'.

× It's making me feel comfortable and want to sing more.

✓ It makes me feel comfortable and want to sing more.

The phrase 'It's making' is incorrect here because the sentence describes a habitual action, so the simple present 'It makes' is appropriate.

× I have never learned things before, but I usually practice singing with my friend in karaoke.

✓ I have never learned to sing before, but I usually practice singing with my friend in karaoke.

The phrase 'learned things' is vague and incorrect; 'learned to sing' is more precise. Also, 'have never learned' is correct present perfect tense for experience.

× I usually choose a simple task to sing and feeling connected with my friends.

✓ I usually choose a simple song to sing and feel connected with my friends.

The verb 'feeling' should be in base form 'feel' to match the parallel structure with 'choose' and 'sing'. Also, 'task' is incorrect; 'song' fits the context better.

× Of course I want to sing for my mother because if she was dedicated and caring for my family, I believe music can show how much I love her and it will make her feel and hopefully.

✓ Of course I want to sing for my mother because she is dedicated and caring for my family. I believe music can show how much I love her and it will make her feel happy.

The sentence is structurally incorrect and incomplete. 'If she was' is incorrect here; 'she is' fits better. The phrase 'make her feel and hopefully' is incomplete; 'make her feel happy' completes the thought.

× When people think they will, they can relax and joyful.

✓ When people think they will, they can relax and feel joyful.

The adjective 'joyful' needs a verb 'feel' to correctly describe the state. 'Relax' is a verb, so 'feel joyful' matches the structure.

× Or tonic with all the people.

✓ Or connect with all the people.

The phrase 'Or tonic with all the people' is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Likely intended meaning is 'connect with all the people'.