Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法和表达不够流畅，有重复和语音停顿，建议简化句子结构，避免重复，使用更自然的表达方式。

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relieve stress and forget about my worries. Singing makes me feel happy and relaxed.

提案: 回答内容不够清晰，表达不完整，语法错误较多。建议用完整句子描述学习过程，避免断句和错误词汇。

例: I have taught myself to sing by listening carefully to a singer and trying to follow her tempo and style.

提案: 回答较简短且有停顿，建议增加细节说明，使用连贯的句子表达感情。

例: I want to sing for my boyfriend because singing is a way for me to express my love and feelings towards him.

提案: 回答中有多处发音和语法错误，表达不清晰。建议使用正确词汇，简洁表达观点，并用连接词使句子连贯。

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring people not only happiness but also courage and bravery, which are special benefits of singing.

× MMM well yes I do like singing because it and singing can release my pressure and uh when you are singing you can for for forget about lot of things of reality it it will make makes you happy.

✓ MMM well yes I do like singing because it can release my pressure and uh when you are singing you can forget about a lot of things in reality it will make you happy.

句中“for for forget”重复且多余，“forget”后缺少冠词“a”修饰“lot of things”，并且“of reality”应改为“in reality”表示“在现实中”。此外，“it and singing”结构不清晰，应删去“and singing”使句子通顺。

× I have learned how to sing by myself, by one paragraph. You hear the singer saying. And you followed her temple to sing, That's all.

✓ I have learned how to sing by myself, by one paragraph. You hear the singer singing. And you follow her tempo to sing, that's all.

“You hear the singer saying”应改为“singing”，因为这里描述的是正在进行的动作，使用动名词更合适。“followed”应改为“follow”，因为句子时态为现在完成时，后续动作应保持一致时态。单词“temple”应为“tempo”，表示节奏。

× You hear the singer saying. And you followed her temple to sing, That's all.

✓ You hear the singer singing. And you follow her tempo to sing, that's all.

“temple”是错误拼写，应为“tempo”，表示音乐节奏。

× My boyfriend, I guess I sing a lot of songs for him to express my love, uh, feelings.

✓ My boyfriend, I guess I sing a lot of songs for him to express my love and feelings.

“love, uh, feelings”中“love”和“feelings”应用连词“and”连接，表示“爱和感情”，使表达更完整。

× Yes, I think sin can bring happiness to people even more. Not not only happiness, but also courage and brave. That's the especial functions for of of seeing can bring bring people those emotions.

✓ Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people even more. Not only happiness, but also courage and bravery. Those are the special functions that singing can bring to people.

“sin”应为“singing”，拼写错误。“brave”是形容词，需改为名词“bravery”与“courage”并列。“especial”应为“special”。“functions for of of seeing can bring bring”重复且错误，应简化为“functions that singing can bring”。