Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is good but you can improve by using more varied vocabulary and linking words to make your response more natural and coherent. For example, instead of repeating 'helps', you can use synonyms and add linking words like 'because' or 'so that'.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it allows me to unwind and convey my feelings. For instance, whenever I'm stressed, singing serves as my favorite pastime to boost my mood.

提案: Try to avoid repeating the same words like 'helps' and 'singing'. Use linking words such as 'which' or 'therefore' to connect ideas smoothly. Also, be careful with tense consistency and plural forms.

例: Yes, I have learned how to sing. When I was in school, I participated in a vocal training class which improved my speech and vocal skills. Singing has always fascinated me because it enables me to express my emotions and boosts my confidence.

提案: Avoid filler words like 'Uh' and try to use more precise linking words such as 'especially' or 'particularly' to make your answer more fluent. Also, try to combine sentences to avoid redundancy.

例: I usually sing for myself, but occasionally I perform for my family because they always support me and enjoy listening. Singing for them makes me feel happy and connected, particularly during special occasions like festivals or birthdays.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant. To improve, you can add more varied vocabulary and linking phrases to enhance coherence and naturalness.

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness to people since it enables emotional expression and stress relief. For example, whenever I sing my favorite song, I feel uplifted and joyful.

× whenever I'm feeling stressed, singing would be my favorite hobby to lift my mood.

✓ whenever I'm feeling stressed, singing is my favorite hobby to lift my mood.

The modal verb 'would' is incorrectly used here to express a habitual action. Since the sentence describes a regular occurrence, the simple present tense 'is' should be used instead to indicate a habitual fact.

× I took part in a vocal training class which helps me correct my speech and my vocals.

✓ I took part in a vocal training class which helped me correct my speech and my vocals.

The verb 'helps' is in the present tense, but the action refers to a past event ('I took part'). Therefore, the verb should be in the past tense 'helped' to maintain tense consistency.

× Uh, it's especially during special occasions like festivals or birthdays.

✓ Uh, it's especially true during special occasions like festivals or birthdays.

The original sentence lacks a main verb and is incomplete. Adding 'true' after 'especially' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning. The preposition 'during' is correctly used here.