Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中有较多重复和语法错误，影响了表达的流畅性。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并且注意时态和单复数的正确使用。同时，回答应更自然，避免机械地堆砌信息。

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax when I am stressed. For example, I often sing in the shower while watching music videos. My favorite singer is Jane Joe.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和重复，表达不够清晰。建议使用简单明了的句子，避免重复，并且注意动词时态和搭配的正确使用。

例: I have never had professional singing training because it requires a lot of time and money. However, I watch videos every day to learn singing on my own.

提案: 回答中代词使用错误，句子结构混乱，影响理解。建议理清句子结构，正确使用代词，并且表达感谢时用词准确。

例: I want to sing for my mom because she works hard at home every day and is often very tired. Singing is my way to show her how thankful I am.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不完整。建议简洁明了地表达观点，使用连贯的句子，并提供具体例子支持观点。

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness and help people relax. For example, when I feel upset, I sing songs to improve my mood.

× Yes, I do like singing because it it is can it it can relax my stressful and for example, when I when I take a shower I will singing and I will look the music videos.

✓ Yes, I do like singing because it can relax me when I am stressed. For example, when I take a shower, I will sing and watch music videos.

句中“will singing”错误，动词后应接动词原形或进行时态，这里应为“will sing”。此外，“stressful”用法错误，应使用“stressed”表示感到压力。句子结构混乱，需简化表达。

× My favorite singer is the Jane Joe.

✓ My favorite singer is Jane Joe.

专有名词前通常不加定冠词“the”，除非是特定情况。这里“the Jane Joe”错误，应去掉“the”。

× If you mean the professional training I have, I have never take it before because, uh, it will take up some take up a lot of time and money to do it.

✓ If you mean professional training, I have never taken it before because it takes up a lot of time and money.

“have never take”应为现在完成时，动词用过去分词“taken”。“it will take up some take up a lot of time”重复且时态不当，应改为一般现在时“it takes up a lot of time”。

× Uh, but if you mean the what, just watch a video that I watch it, watch it every day and learn, learn it.

✓ But if you mean just watching videos, I watch them every day and learn from them.

“watch a video that I watch it”中“that”和“it”重复，且代词使用不当。应使用复数代词“them”指代“videos”，并简化句子结构。

× Umm, uh, I want to sing for my mom because he's busy in the house wake labor every day, and then always I thought that he was so tired, tired.

✓ I want to sing for my mom because she is busy with housework every day, and I think she is very tired.

“he's”指代“mom”错误，应为“she”。“wake labor”表达不正确，应为“housework”。时态和句子结构也需调整。

× So I will I will use this song sing use the songs to express her express our express my thankful.

✓ So I will use songs to express my gratitude to her.

句子中“express her express our express my thankful”结构混乱，代词使用错误，应简化为“express my gratitude to her”。

× Yes, I do in my field, the sing a song sing a song can bring the happiness and and help me to relax my umm, pre uh, pressure.

✓ Yes, I do. Singing a song can bring happiness and help me relax when I feel stressed.

“the sing a song”错误，动名词形式应为“singing a song”。“the happiness”不需要定冠词，应为“happiness”。“pre uh, pressure”表达不清，应改为“when I feel stressed”。

× Yes, I do in my field, the sing a song sing a song can bring the happiness and and help me to relax my umm, pre uh, pressure.

✓ Yes, I do. Singing a song can bring happiness and help me relax when I feel stressed.

“the happiness”中定冠词“the”使用错误，抽象名词前通常不加冠词。

× Uh, for example, when I when I feel upset and uh, I then I will sing a song to umm, turn, turn around my.

✓ For example, when I feel upset, I will sing a song to cheer myself up.

“turn, turn around my”表达不完整且不正确，应使用固定搭配“cheer myself up”表示振作起来。