Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer has good content but contains many hesitations and some grammatical errors. Try to speak more fluently and use correct verb forms. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. Use linking words like 'because' and 'now' properly to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I like singing because it helps me relax and feel refreshed. When I was younger, I used to listen to rock music, but now I prefer classical music because it calms me. In the future, I would like to use singing to relieve stress.

提案: Your answer is understandable but has many hesitations and some incorrect word choices like 'endured' instead of 'enrolled'. Try to use correct vocabulary and avoid repeating phrases. Also, organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words like 'but' and 'because'.

例: No, I have never learned to sing formally because I have not enrolled in any music school. However, I love listening to music. My younger sister is a professional singer, and I have bought some musical instruments from her to practice.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations and grammatical mistakes. Try to speak more clearly and directly answer the question. Use linking words like 'although' and 'sometimes' properly. Keep your sentences simple and avoid unnecessary fillers.

例: Although I am not a professional singer, I sometimes sing at family events or cultural programs when my friends and family ask me to.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and has many grammatical errors. Try to complete your thoughts and use correct sentence structures. Use linking words like 'first of all', 'secondly', and 'last but not least' correctly. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

例: I think singing can bring happiness to people in many ways. First of all, it helps them feel refreshed and active after a busy day. Secondly, singing can help people forget their sad memories. Lastly, it creates a joyful atmosphere that lifts people's spirits.

× I used to say, uh, listen some rock music.

✓ I used to say, uh, listen to some rock music.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by an object. So, 'listen some rock music' is incorrect; it should be 'listen to some rock music'. This is a common preposition usage error.

× I love to listen some classical music because it, uh, make me feel calm.

✓ I love to listen to some classical music because it, uh, makes me feel calm.

Again, 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' before the object. Also, 'it' is third person singular, so the verb should be 'makes' not 'make'. This combines preposition and subject-verb agreement errors.

× I love to listen some classical music because it, uh, make me feel calm.

✓ I love to listen to some classical music because it, uh, makes me feel calm.

The verb 'listen' must be followed by 'to' when indicating what is being listened to. Also, 'it' as a singular subject requires 'makes' instead of 'make' for correct subject-verb agreement.

× And in the future, I would like to different stress of singing that will help.

✓ And in the future, I would like to relieve stress through singing because it will help.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'Different stress of singing' is not a correct phrase. The sentence needs restructuring to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× I never endured myself in any academic, uh, music institutions.

✓ I never enrolled myself in any academic, uh, music institutions.

The verb 'endure' is incorrectly used here; likely the intended verb is 'enroll'. Also, 'myself' is acceptable here as a reflexive pronoun, but the verb choice is wrong, causing confusion.

× I love to listen music.

✓ I love to listen to music.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' before the object. Omitting 'to' is a common preposition error.

× I have also purchased some musical instruments from my younger sister because he is a professional singer.

✓ I have also purchased some musical instruments from my younger sister because she is a professional singer.

The pronoun 'he' is incorrect when referring to 'my younger sister'. The correct pronoun is 'she' to match the feminine noun.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Whom do you want to sing for?

In formal English, 'whom' is the correct object pronoun after a preposition like 'for'. However, in spoken English, 'who' is often used informally.

× Uh, though I don't have any professional knowledge of thinking, however, uh, sometimes when they attend some uh, family programs, uh, events, uh, or cultural, uh, musical, uh, programs, I sometimes sing music, uh, with the due to the request of my friends and family members despite I don't have any profession.

✓ Although I don't have any professional knowledge of singing, sometimes when my friends and family attend family, cultural, or musical events, I sing at their request despite not being a professional.

The original sentence is very long, confusing, and contains incorrect phrases like 'knowledge of thinking' and 'with the due to the request'. It needs to be simplified and corrected for clarity and grammar.

× The thinking can bring happiness on several occasions.

✓ Singing can bring happiness on several occasions.

'Thinking' is incorrect in context; likely 'singing' is intended. Also, 'bring happiness on' is acceptable, but 'bring happiness to' is more common. The main issue is the wrong word choice.

× Secondly, singing can help people to for to forget their sad memories so that people can easily forget it.

✓ Secondly, singing can help people to forget their sad memories so that they can easily forget them.

The phrase 'to for to forget' is incorrect and redundant. Also, pronouns should agree in number and clarity; 'people' and 'it' mismatch, so 'they' and 'them' are better.

× And last but not least, it also helps people to.

✓ And last but not least, it also helps people to feel better.

The sentence is incomplete and needs a proper ending to convey the intended meaning.