Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在拼写错误（"seeing"应为"singing"），且表达不够自然，句子结构稍显混乱。建议注意拼写，简化句子结构，使表达更流畅自然。

例: Yes, I love singing because it helps me express my emotions and relax after studying hard.

提案: 回答语法错误较多，表达不清晰，且句子冗长。建议简化句子，注意时态和语法，明确表达学习唱歌的经历。

例: Yes, I used to be bad at singing, but I wanted to improve, so I took part in extracurricular singing classes.

提案: 句子结构不正确，时态和表达不准确。建议使用简单明了的句子，直接回答问题并说明原因。

例: I want to sing for my girlfriend because singing is a great way to show love to someone special.

提案: 回答中有口语填充词（"MMM"），表达不够连贯，句子结构复杂且有语法错误。建议去除无意义词汇，使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, singing can bring happiness because it helps people relax and change their mindset when they feel stressed in city life.

× Yes, I am really a singing lover because I think seeing is a good way to express your own emotions and it's also a good way to relax after studying hard.

✓ Yes, I am really a singing lover because I think singing is a good way to express your own emotions and it's also a good way to relax after studying hard.

句中“seeing”应为“singing”，因为上下文讨论的是唱歌，动词应使用动名词形式表示动作。

× Yes, of course I used to be poor at singing, but I have a desire to sing where to arouse audience or other students, so I take part in took part in an extracurricular classes.

✓ Yes, of course I used to be poor at singing, but I have a desire to sing to arouse the audience or other students, so I took part in extracurricular classes.

“take part in took part in”重复且时态不一致，应使用过去式“took part in”。“where to arouse”结构不正确，应改为“to arouse”。“an extracurricular classes”中“an”与复数“classes”不匹配，应去掉冠词。

× Yes, of course I used to be poor at singing, but I have a desire to sing where to arouse audience or other students, so I take part in took part in an extracurricular classes.

✓ Yes, of course I used to be poor at singing, but I have a desire to sing to arouse the audience or other students, so I took part in extracurricular classes.

“audience”前缺少定冠词“the”，因为这里指特定的听众。

× The people I want to sing for is my girlfriend because I was saying singing is the best way to express your love to your dear person.

✓ The people I want to sing for are my girlfriend because I was saying singing is the best way to express your love to your dear person.

主语“The people”是复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式“are”。

× The people I want to sing for is my girlfriend because I was saying singing is the best way to express your love to your dear person.

✓ The people I want to sing for are my girlfriend because I am saying singing is the best way to express your love to your dear person.

“was saying”时态不符合语境，表达现在的观点应使用现在进行时“am saying”。

× The people I want to sing for is my girlfriend because I was saying singing is the best way to express your love to your dear person.

✓ The person I want to sing for is my girlfriend because I am saying singing is the best way to express your love to your dear person.

“The people”指复数，但后文只提到“my girlfriend”，应改为单数“person”。

× Yes, of course MMM people sometimes feel very stressed in modern city life, but if they hear the songs they can feel relaxed and more and shift their mindset about what's truly matters in their life.

✓ Yes, of course many people sometimes feel very stressed in modern city life, but if they hear songs they can feel relaxed and shift their mindset about what truly matters in their life.

“MMM”应为“many”，表示数量。去掉“the”因为“songs”泛指歌曲。去掉多余的“and more”。“what's truly matters”中“'s”多余，应为“what truly matters”。