Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answers clearer and more natural by avoiding repetition and correcting grammar. For example, say "I like singing because it makes me feel free and relaxed." Also, avoid unnecessary phrases like "I like to think" and use correct articles, e.g., "an anthem."

例: Yes, I like singing because it makes me feel free and relaxed. My favourite song is "My Heart Will Go On," which is the anthem from the movie Titanic. I really enjoy listening to and singing this song.

提案: Focus on making your sentences complete and coherent. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, say "Yes, I learnt to sing in high school when my music teacher taught us. I also joined the choir and sang hymns at the chapel."

例: Yes, I learnt to sing when I was in high school. My music teacher taught us singing techniques, and I joined the choir where I sang hymns at the chapel.

提案: Try to express your ideas clearly and avoid repetition. Use correct grammar and complete sentences. For example, say "I would like to sing for my girlfriend, but I don't have one yet. If I had a girlfriend, I would sing for her."

例: I would like to sing for my girlfriend, but I don't have one at the moment. If I had a girlfriend, I would definitely sing for her.

提案: Make sure your answer is relevant and clear. Avoid confusing or unrelated stories. Instead, explain your opinion directly with reasons. For example, say "Yes, singing can bring happiness because it helps people express their feelings and relax."

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness to people because it allows them to express their emotions and feel joyful. Singing can also help reduce stress and improve mood.

× Yes, I like to sing because when I when I was singing I feel the flu, I feel free.

✓ Yes, I like to sing because when I was singing I feel free.

The phrase 'I feel the flu' is incorrect and likely a typo or misuse. The intended meaning is probably 'I feel free'. Also, 'when I when I was singing' has a repeated phrase which should be corrected to 'when I was singing'. The verb 'feel' is correctly in present tense to express a general feeling.

× Therefore, I like to think my my favorite song is My Heart Will Go on.

✓ Therefore, I like to think my favorite song is 'My Heart Will Go On'.

The repetition of 'my' is an error and should be corrected to a single 'my'. Also, song titles should be capitalized and enclosed in quotes for clarity. The sentence structure is otherwise acceptable.

× This is a anthem of Titanic.

✓ This is an anthem of Titanic.

The word 'anthem' begins with a vowel sound, so the indefinite article should be 'an' instead of 'a'. This is a common article usage rule in English.

× I really like to keep this song.

✓ I really like this song.

The verb 'keep' is incorrectly used here. The intended meaning is likely 'I really like this song' or 'I really like to listen to this song'. 'Keep' is not appropriate in this context.

× When I was a high school student I was.

✓ When I was a high school student, I was.

The sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly. It should be completed or rephrased for clarity. Possibly, the student intended to say 'When I was a high school student, I was taught singing' or similar.

× I was told by my music music teacher she taught how to sing.

✓ I was told by my music teacher that she taught us how to sing.

The sentence is missing the conjunction 'that' to connect the clauses. Also, 'music music teacher' is a repetition error. The verb 'taught' is correctly in past tense.

× Called us.

✓ She called us.

The sentence fragment 'Called us.' lacks a subject. It should be 'She called us.' to be a complete sentence.

× Yes, I joined choir and I sang hymns at the Chapel.

✓ Yes, I joined the choir and sang hymns at the chapel.

The sentence is mostly correct. Adding 'the' before 'choir' and 'chapel' is appropriate as they refer to specific places. Also, 'sang' is correctly in past tense.

× Uh, I want to sing for my girlfriend but I don't have girlfriend at.

✓ Uh, I want to sing for my girlfriend but I don't have a girlfriend yet.

The phrase 'have girlfriend at' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'have a girlfriend yet' to indicate the absence of a girlfriend currently.

× So if I had a girlfriend I want to I want to sing for her but I have to make a girlfriend at first.

✓ So if I had a girlfriend, I would want to sing for her, but I have to find a girlfriend first.

The conditional sentence requires 'would' to express the hypothetical situation. 'Make a girlfriend' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'find a girlfriend' or 'get a girlfriend'. Also, 'at first' is better replaced with 'first'.

× Do you know Glass Hopper story?

✓ Do you know the story of the Grasshopper?

The phrase 'Glass Hopper story' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'the story of the Grasshopper'. Also, 'Glass Hopper' is likely a mishearing of 'Grasshopper'.

× This is Glasshopper assigned to ants.

✓ This is a grasshopper assigned to ants.

The sentence lacks an article before 'grasshopper'. Also, 'assigned to ants' is unclear; it might be better to say 'This is a story about a grasshopper and ants'.

× Therefore ants can work hard.

✓ Therefore, ants can work hard.

A comma is needed after 'Therefore' to separate the introductory word from the main clause.

× This story shows As this story shows singing.

✓ As this story shows, singing...

The sentence is incomplete and repetitive. It should be rephrased to 'As this story shows, singing...'. A comma is needed after the introductory clause.

× Singing enabled people to work hard.

✓ Singing enables people to work hard.

The present tense 'enables' is more appropriate here to express a general truth. 'Enabled' is past tense and suggests a completed action.