Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it is slightly repetitive and could be more concise. Try to avoid repeating similar ideas and use linking words to make your answer more coherent. Also, aim to keep your response within 5 sentences for better effectiveness.

例: I enjoy singing because it allows me to express my feelings genuinely through my unique voice. Moreover, it helps me to relax and unwind. Additionally, singing with friends makes the experience more enjoyable and social.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but lacks detail and coherence. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide more specific information about the training or experiences you had. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'important work' and be more precise.

例: Yes, I have learnt how to sing since primary school when I joined a choir team. We received strict training that focused on vocal techniques and teamwork, which helped me improve my singing skills significantly.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to improve coherence and be careful with sentence completion and grammar.

例: I want to sing for myself because I believe that singing allows me to express my true emotions. Since we hear our own voice, it feels like the most genuine way to represent who we are.

提案: Your answer is relevant but lacks fluency and contains some hesitations and grammatical mistakes. Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and use linking words to organise your ideas clearly. Also, use more precise vocabulary and correct grammar.

例: Yes, singing can bring happiness to people, although it depends on the type of song. For example, joyful songs by artists like Taylor Swift and Katy Perry often uplift listeners and create a positive mood.

× I like singing because it can help me to express my feelings genuinely by using my own unique voice to express myself, and it's also a great way to relax myself as well.

✓ I like singing because it can help me express my feelings genuinely by using my own unique voice to express myself, and it's also a great way to relax myself as well.

The verb 'help' is often followed by the base form of the verb without 'to'. Using 'to express' after 'help me' is incorrect in this context. The correct form is 'help me express'. This improves the sentence's grammatical accuracy and fluency.

× We got some strict training and we have to go through a lot of important work.

✓ We got some strict training and we have to go through a lot of important tasks.

The word 'work' is uncountable and cannot be pluralized directly. To express multiple units, a countable noun like 'tasks' should be used. This correction clarifies the meaning and corrects the singular/plural usage.

× I want to sing for myself because I believe that the melodies that we express through our voice is able to represent ourselves the best because we usually hear what we sing and hear what we say, and using our voice to sing is the most genuine way to express our.

✓ I want to sing for myself because I believe that the melodies that we express through our voices are able to represent ourselves the best because we usually hear what we sing and hear what we say, and using our voice to sing is the most genuine way to express ourselves.

The subject 'melodies' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. Also, 'voice' should be pluralized to 'voices' to agree with 'we'. The sentence ends abruptly with 'express our', which should be completed as 'express ourselves' to be grammatically correct and meaningful.

× Yes, but it depends on the context of your choice because some of the songs may be more sad and some of the songs might be more hap joyful.

✓ Yes, but it depends on the context of your choice because some of the songs may be sadder and some of the songs might be more joyful.

The adjective 'sad' should be in comparative form 'sadder' when comparing songs. The phrase 'hap joyful' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'joyful'. This correction improves the sentence's clarity and grammatical correctness.