Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and effective with good content and linking words. To improve, try to use a wider range of vocabulary and avoid repeating simple words like 'singing' too often by using synonyms or pronouns.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing as it helps me unwind and convey my feelings. For instance, when I'm stressed, performing my favourite tune elevates my spirits and brightens my day. Moreover, it serves as an enjoyable means to bond with others at social events.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant but contains a small grammatical error ('have learned learn'). Also, try to use more varied vocabulary and linking words to make your response smoother.

例: Yes, I have learnt how to sing. During my school days, I participated in a choir where a music instructor taught us fundamental singing techniques along with breathing exercises. Consequently, this experience enhanced my vocal control and boosted my confidence.

提案: Your answer is good but the phrase 'Singing from them' is unclear. Try to use clearer expressions and add linking words to improve coherence.

例: I would like to sing for my family and close friends. Performing for them feels more personal and meaningful since they understand me well and value my efforts. Furthermore, their support and encouragement inspire me to keep improving and enjoy singing even more.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical errors ('with other' should be 'with others', 'In a group of choir' should be 'In a choir group'). Also, try to use more precise vocabulary and linking words for better clarity.

例: Yes, I believe singing can certainly bring happiness to people. It enables individuals to express their emotions and is especially uplifting when performed with others. For example, in a choir group, many people feel joyful and relaxed while singing their favourite songs, which helps enhance their mood.

× Yes, I have learned learn how to sing.

✓ Yes, I have learned how to sing.

The verb 'learn' is incorrectly repeated after 'have learned'. The correct past participle form 'learned' should be used alone after 'have'. The extra 'learn' is redundant and grammatically incorrect.

× Singing from them feels more personal and meaningful because they know me well and appreciate my efforts.

✓ Singing for them feels more personal and meaningful because they know me well and appreciate my efforts.

The preposition 'from' is incorrectly used here. The correct preposition is 'for' when indicating the recipient of an action like singing. 'Singing for them' means performing to them, which fits the context.

× Singing allows individuals to express their emotions and can be very uplifting, especially when done with other.

✓ Singing allows individuals to express their emotions and can be very uplifting, especially when done with others.

The pronoun 'other' is singular and incorrect in this context. The plural form 'others' should be used to refer to other people collectively.

× In a group of choir, for example, many people feel joyful and relaxed when they sing their favorite songs, which helps improve their mood.

✓ In a choir group, for example, many people feel joyful and relaxed when they sing their favorite songs, which helps improve their mood.

The phrase 'a group of choir' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'a choir group' or 'a group of choir members'. Here, 'choir group' is more natural and grammatically correct.