Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer shows enthusiasm but has some grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'read from your long dress dress'. Try to use clear and correct expressions. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and relieve stress. I usually sing in my bathroom at home where I feel comfortable. Singing is my favourite hobby during my leisure time, and it always lifts my mood.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing like 'I absorb sometime my friend'. Try to use correct verb forms and clearer sentences. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: To be honest, I have never formally learned how to sing. However, I sometimes listen carefully to my friend when he sings because he is a great singer. Additionally, I enjoy watching the Indian Idol show, where talented singers perform their songs.

提案: Your answer is heartfelt but has some repetition and unclear phrases like 'she learned for us how to run a saloon'. Try to avoid repeating the same idea and use clearer expressions. Also, organise your answer with linking words for better flow.

例: I would love to sing a song for my mother because she has worked very hard to raise me. She owns a salon and taught us how to manage it. Although we come from a humble background, her dedication inspires me a lot.

提案: Your answer conveys your feelings well but has some grammatical errors like 'it give me motivation'. Try to use correct verb forms and more precise vocabulary. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. Whenever I sing, I feel lighter and more cheerful. Moreover, when I feel down, singing motivates me to do better in life.

× Absolutely yes.

✓ Absolutely.

The phrase 'Absolutely yes' is incorrect because 'absolutely' is an adverb and should not be directly followed by 'yes' in this context. The correct response is simply 'Absolutely' to express strong agreement.

× I believe singing can give you read from your long dress dress sometime.

✓ I believe singing can give you relief from your long stress sometimes.

The original sentence has incorrect word usage and prepositions. 'Read from your long dress dress sometime' is nonsensical. The intended meaning seems to be that singing provides relief from stress. 'Relief from your long stress sometimes' is the correct phrase, using the preposition 'from' properly.

× I sing in my house bathroom.

✓ I sing in my house's bathroom.

The phrase 'my house bathroom' is incorrect because it lacks the possessive form. The correct form is 'my house's bathroom' to indicate the bathroom belonging to the house.

× I feel comfortable while singing in bathroom.

✓ I feel comfortable while singing in the bathroom.

The noun 'bathroom' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific bathroom. Omitting 'the' is incorrect here.

× I sing because it's singing is my leisure time hobby.

✓ I sing because singing is my leisure time hobby.

The phrase 'it's singing is' is incorrect. 'It's' is a contraction for 'it is' or 'it has' and is unnecessary here. The correct sentence is 'singing is my leisure time hobby' without 'it's'.

× To be honest I have never learned how to sing but I absorb sometime my friend while he was singing, he's a great singer as well as sometimes I watch show of Indian Idol which is a show where singers sing their songs.

✓ To be honest, I have never learned how to sing but I sometimes absorb from my friend while he was singing; he's a great singer. Also, sometimes I watch the show Indian Idol, which is a show where singers sing their songs.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'absorb sometime my friend' is incorrect; it should be 'sometimes absorb from my friend'. Also, 'watch show of Indian Idol' lacks the article 'the' before 'show'. Commas and semicolons are added for clarity.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Who do you want to sing to?

The verb 'sing' is usually followed by the preposition 'to' when indicating the person receiving the singing. 'Sing for' is also acceptable but 'sing to' is more precise when referring to the audience.

× She worked very hard to raise me.

✓ She has worked very hard to raise me.

The present perfect tense 'has worked' is more appropriate here to indicate an action that started in the past and continues to have relevance now.

× She is a saloon owner and she learned for us how to run a saloon.

✓ She is a saloon owner and she taught us how to run a saloon.

The verb 'learned for us' is incorrect. The correct verb is 'taught' when indicating someone instructing others. Also, 'saloon' is likely intended to be 'salon' (a place for beauty treatments), but as per instruction, only grammar issues are corrected.

× Actually we are not from a great family.

✓ Actually, we are not from a wealthy family.

The phrase 'great family' is vague and possibly incorrect in this context. 'Wealthy family' is more appropriate to express financial status. A comma after 'Actually' improves sentence flow.

× She worked very hard to raise me.

✓ She has worked very hard to raise me.

Same as previous correction: present perfect tense 'has worked' is better to show ongoing relevance.

× Yes, I believe that singing can give happiness to the people because whenever I sing I feel light and whenever I feel low I like to sing and it give me motivation to do great in my life.

✓ Yes, I believe that singing can give happiness to people because whenever I sing I feel light, and whenever I feel low I like to sing and it gives me motivation to do great in my life.

The phrase 'give happiness to the people' is better as 'give happiness to people' without 'the'. Also, 'it give me' should be 'it gives me' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Commas added for clarity.