Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Hãy tránh các câu rời rạc và sử dụng các liên từ để kết nối ý, đồng thời nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề rõ ràng và bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể hơn.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and recharge after a long day. Moreover, singing allows me to practice my voice and share joy with my friends by performing for them.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng hơn về việc học hát và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Ngoài ra, hãy giải thích thêm về trải nghiệm học hát và cảm nhận cá nhân để câu trả lời phong phú hơn.

例: Yes, I have learned how to sing. For example, I practiced the song "Naanum Sajan" by Sancho MTBS, who is also my favorite singer. Learning this song helped me improve my vocal skills and express my emotions better.

提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sau đó giải thích lý do hoặc cảm xúc của bạn khi hát cho người khác nghe.

例: I want to sing for my friends because they enjoy listening to me. It makes me happy when everyone sings along, creating a joyful atmosphere.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, giải thích rõ ràng hơn về lợi ích của việc hát và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp để truyền đạt ý tưởng một cách hiệu quả.

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it generates positive energy and helps people relax their minds. It feels like a spiritual force that refreshes our mood and lifts our spirits.

× Singing makes me feel happy, re energize me after a long tiring day.

✓ Singing makes me feel happy, re-energizes me after a long tiring day.

The verb 're energize' should be in the third person singular present tense 're-energizes' to agree with the singular subject 'Singing'. Also, 're-energize' is a phrasal verb and should be hyphenated.

× Help me practice my voice.

✓ It helps me practice my voice.

The original sentence lacks a subject, making it a sentence fragment. Adding 'It' as the subject clarifies the sentence.

× I like to sing for my friend to listen to, a trust for myself to listen to.

✓ I like to sing for my friends to listen to, and as a treat for myself to listen to.

The phrase 'a trust for myself' is incorrect; 'a treat for myself' is appropriate. Also, 'friend' should be plural 'friends' to match the context.

× I once learned a song for example Naanum Sajan by Sancho MTBS and he is also the singer I love.

✓ I once learned a song, for example, 'Naanum Sajan' by Sancho MTBS, who is also the singer I love.

Added commas for clarity and changed 'and he is' to 'who is' to correctly connect the clause.

× My friend really like to hear me sing because I sing very well.

✓ My friends really like to hear me sing because I sing very well.

The subject 'My friend' is singular but the verb 'like' is plural. Changing 'friend' to plural 'friends' matches the plural verb 'like'.

× Whenever I think everyone sing along with me, I feel very happy.

✓ Whenever I think everyone sings along with me, I feel very happy.

The verb 'sing' should be in third person singular present tense 'sings' to agree with the subject 'everyone'.

× I think singing will bring positive energy to people is help to relax the mind and rest on the most.

✓ I think singing will bring positive energy to people and help relax the mind and body the most.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Added conjunction 'and' and rephrased for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× It's like it's spiritual force without it.

✓ It's like a spiritual force without which we cannot live.

The original sentence is unclear and incomplete. Rephrased to convey a complete and meaningful idea.

× Let us be really pouring and do.

✓ Let us really pour our hearts into it and do it.

The original sentence is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Rephrased to express the intended meaning clearly.