Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: คำตอบของคุณควรใช้ไวยากรณ์ที่ถูกต้องและประโยคที่ชัดเจนมากขึ้น เช่น การใช้ 'love to sing' แทน 'love to singing' และควรหลีกเลี่ยงคำที่ไม่ชัดเจนหรือไม่เกี่ยวข้อง เช่น 'make me not straight' และ 'thinking is important of my life in Messenger' ควรตอบตรงประเด็นและใช้ประโยคที่สมบูรณ์เพื่อความเข้าใจที่ดีขึ้น

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and makes me happy. Singing is very important in my life, and I hope to make it my future career.

提案: คำตอบควรมีความชัดเจนและเป็นระบบมากขึ้น ควรหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำซ้ำหรือคำที่ไม่สมเหตุสมผล เช่น 'I know my accents YouTube teaching me about my accent' และควรใช้ linking words เพื่อเชื่อมประโยคให้ลื่นไหล

例: Yes, I have learned how to sing by watching tutorials on YouTube and TikTok. These videos helped me improve my accent and singing skills.

提案: ควรใช้ประโยคที่ชัดเจนและหลีกเลี่ยงคำซ้ำหรือคำที่ไม่จำเป็น เช่น 'umm' และควรใช้ linking words เพื่อเชื่อมความคิด เช่น 'because' และให้รายละเอียดที่ชัดเจนเกี่ยวกับเหตุผลที่อยากร้องเพลงให้ครอบครัว

例: I want to sing for my family because they always support me in everything. I especially want to sing love songs to show my appreciation.

提案: คำตอบควรมีความชัดเจนและถูกต้องทางไวยากรณ์ ควรหลีกเลี่ยงคำที่ไม่เหมาะสมหรือไม่ถูกต้อง เช่น 'editing singing can't help people hobbies' และควรใช้ linking words เพื่อเชื่อมประโยคให้สมเหตุสมผล

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it helps me relax and feel joyful. It is a great hobby that lifts my mood.

× Yes I do, I love to singing.

✓ Yes I do, I love singing.

The verb 'love' is followed by the gerund form (verb + -ing), not the infinitive with 'to'. Therefore, 'love to singing' is incorrect; it should be 'love singing'.

× It's made me relax, make me not straight, make me laugh.

✓ It makes me relax, makes me feel less stressed, and makes me laugh.

The original sentence has inconsistent verb forms and unclear expressions. 'It's made me relax' mixes tenses improperly. Also, 'make me not straight' is unclear; likely intended to mean 'make me feel less stressed'. The corrected sentence uses present simple tense consistently and clarifies meaning.

× So thinking is important of my life in Messenger.

✓ So singing is an important part of my life.

The original sentence is unclear and contains incorrect word usage ('thinking' instead of 'singing', 'in Messenger' is irrelevant). The correction clarifies the intended meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× Singing is, uh, my job, a future of course.

✓ Singing is, uh, my job and my future, of course.

The original sentence lacks proper conjunction and clarity. Adding 'and' connects the ideas properly, making the sentence clearer.

× I remember myself.

✓ I remember.

The reflexive pronoun 'myself' is unnecessary here. 'Remember' is a transitive verb and does not require a reflexive pronoun.

× I am on Tiktok, I learned on YouTube and I know my accents YouTube teaching me about my accent like this and to talk umm I think with to talk about again.

✓ I am on TikTok, I have learned from YouTube, and I know my accent because YouTube teaches me about it. I think I need to practice speaking again.

The original sentence mixes tenses and has unclear phrasing. 'Learned' should be present perfect 'have learned' to indicate experience. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct tense usage.

× I want to sing for my family because my family umm, exhibits support me when I wanna see my family, umm, support everything when I want and umm I wanna sing umm, love songs for them.

✓ I want to sing for my family because they support me whenever I want. I want to sing love songs for them.

The original sentence misuses 'exhibits' and has awkward phrasing. 'My family' is repeated unnecessarily. The correction uses appropriate pronouns and clearer sentence structure.

× Yes I do editing singing can't help people hobbies and help me happy when singing may it help me relax and help me happy and elated.

✓ Yes, I do. Singing can help people with their hobbies and makes me happy. When I sing, it helps me relax and feel elated.

The original sentence is confusing and grammatically incorrect. 'Editing singing' is unclear and likely a mistake. The correction clarifies the meaning and uses proper sentence structure and verb forms.