Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but could be more natural and clear. Try to use more precise vocabulary and avoid redundancy. For example, instead of 'impress my feelings', you can say 'express my feelings'. Also, try to make your sentences more concise and coherent.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because I listen to many singers and music regularly. Singing helps me express my feelings and emotions at that moment.

提案: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and could be more natural. Use correct verb forms and try to link your ideas smoothly. For example, say 'I haven't had professional lessons because of financial reasons, so I teach myself using YouTube videos.'

例: I haven't had professional singing lessons because I couldn't afford them, so I try to teach myself by watching tutorials on YouTube.

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and repetitive. Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid redundancy. For example, say 'I like to sing for myself because it allows me to enjoy my voice and express my feelings.'

例: I like to sing for myself because it helps me enjoy my own voice and express my emotions.

提案: Your answer is quite unclear and contains many grammar and coherence issues. Try to organize your ideas logically and use linking words. For example, say 'Yes, singing can bring happiness. For instance, fans enjoy K-pop concerts where music creates a joyful atmosphere.'

例: Yes, singing definitely brings happiness. For example, fans attending K-pop concerts have a great time enjoying the music and feeling joyful together.

× I like singing because I like many singers and I always listen to music.

✓ I like singing because I like many singers and I always listen to music.

No singular/plural error in this sentence.

× I think singing can help me to impress my feelings at that moment.

✓ I think singing can help me express my feelings at that moment.

The verb 'impress' is incorrectly used here. The correct verb is 'express' to convey feelings. Also, 'help me to express' can be simplified to 'help me express'.

× I didn't really had a professional lessons on how to sing because I do not have money.

✓ I didn't really have professional lessons on how to sing because I do not have money.

After 'didn't', the base form of the verb should be used, so 'had' should be 'have'. Also, 'a professional lessons' is incorrect because 'lessons' is plural and should not have 'a'.

× I didn't really had a professional lessons on how to sing because I do not have money.

✓ I didn't really have professional lessons on how to sing because I do not have money.

'Lessons' is plural, so it should not be preceded by the singular article 'a'.

× I just try to teach myself how to sing by YouTube.

✓ I just try to teach myself how to sing using YouTube.

The preposition 'by' is not appropriate here; 'using' is better to indicate the method. Also, 'try' is present tense which is acceptable if the action is ongoing.

× I want to sing for myself because I want to listen to my voice in the more beautiful way and I like to express my feeling and just for myself.

✓ I want to sing for myself because I want to listen to my voice in a more beautiful way and I like to express my feelings just for myself.

'The more beautiful way' should be 'a more beautiful way' because it is a comparative form without a specific known object. 'Feeling' should be plural 'feelings' to match the context.

× Of course, just like uh, think of the K pop music band.

✓ Of course, just think of the K-pop music band.

No singular/plural error, but 'uh' is filler and can be omitted for clarity.

× Many of many fans when go to their concert and have a really great time at in the concert, everyone likes music and everyone gain happiness in it and everyone likes to sings even though it is not even though.

✓ Many fans go to their concerts and have a really great time at the concert. Everyone likes music and everyone gains happiness from it, and everyone likes to sing even though they are not professional.

'Many of many fans' is incorrect; 'many fans' is correct. 'When go' should be 'go'. 'Concert' should be plural 'concerts' when referring generally. 'Everyone gain' should be 'everyone gains' for subject-verb agreement. 'Likes to sings' should be 'likes to sing' because 'to' is followed by base verb. The last part is unclear and corrected to a meaningful phrase.