Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法和表达不够准确，存在重复和语句不通顺的问题。建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免重复，并使用正确的语法结构。

例: Yes, I like singing very much because it is a great way to express my emotions. For example, when I feel depressed, singing helps me relax and feel better.

提案: 回答中出现了语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，且内容不够连贯。建议直接回答问题，并用连贯的句子说明原因。

例: No, I haven't learned how to sing professionally. I just sing for fun because it helps me relax, and I don't want to make it my career since that might be stressful.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和词汇使用不当，如'hobbits'应为'hobbies'，表达不够清晰。建议使用正确词汇，简洁表达观点，并用连接词使句子连贯。

例: I want to sing for my friends because we share the same interests and hobbies, including liking similar singers. Singing together is always fun and enjoyable.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达重复，且句子结构不够清晰。建议简洁明了地表达观点，使用正确的代词和连词。

例: Personally, I think singing can bring happiness to people. When someone feels depressed, singing can help them release their emotions, and on happy days, it can make them feel even better.

× when I am depressed feelings I can I can use I can through singing to relax myself.

✓ when I have depressed feelings, I can use singing to relax myself.

这里“depressed feelings”是复数，前面的“am”是单数形式，应该用“have”来搭配复数名词，表示“我有抑郁的感觉”。

× I haven't learned how to think.

✓ I haven't learned how to sing.

这里原句中“think”显然是笔误，应为“sing”，且“learned how to sing”是正确的表达。

× I think singing is just a best way to relax myself.

✓ I think singing is just the best way to relax myself.

“best”是最高级，前面应使用定冠词“the”，而不是不定冠词“a”。

× I don't want to be my professional career.

✓ I don't want it to be my professional career.

这里缺少宾语“it”，需要用“it”指代前文内容，表达“我不想让它成为我的职业生涯”。

× Maybe I think I want to sing for my friends because we have the same interests and hobbits and always we have the same interesting, interesting singers.

✓ Maybe I think I want to sing for my friends because we have the same interests and hobbies and we always have the same interesting singers.

“hobbits”应为“hobbies”，表示“爱好”；“interesting, interesting singers”重复，应去掉多余的词。

× So when we sing together we'll always have fun and fascinating.

✓ So when we sing together, we'll always have fun and be fascinated.

“fascinating”是形容词，不能直接用作谓语，应该用“be fascinated”表示“感到着迷”。

× maybe singing can be a way to release herself

✓ maybe singing can be a way to release oneself

这里主语是泛指“some people”，应使用反身代词“oneself”，而不是“herself”。

× I think singing can bring the happiness to the people

✓ I think singing can bring happiness to people

“happiness”作为不可数名词前不需要加定冠词“the”，“people”前也不需要加“the”，表示泛指。