Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ваш ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и нечеткую структуру. Рекомендуется использовать правильные времена и более четко выражать мысли, избегая повторений и излишней длины. Попробуйте строить предложения с четким подлежащим и сказуемым, а также использовать связующие слова для логичности.

例: Yes, I like singing because it makes me feel free and comfortable. After a stressful day, singing helps me relax and express my emotions.

提案: Ответ содержит ошибки в грамматике и структуре предложения, а также нечетко выражена мысль. Рекомендуется использовать правильные времена и более простую, но точную формулировку, а также избегать излишних деталей, которые не связаны напрямую с вопросом.

例: Yes, I have learned singing, but I am not a professional. I usually watch YouTube videos from popular singers and try to imitate them.

提案: Ответ немного неструктурирован и содержит разговорные выражения. Рекомендуется строить предложения более формально и логично, используя связующие слова для плавности речи.

例: I like to sing for myself after a tiring day because it feels like therapy and helps my soul feel free.

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и нечеткую структуру. Рекомендуется использовать правильные местоимения и времена, а также строить предложения более логично и связно.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness. For example, when I have problems or feel stressed, singing helps me feel better and relax.

× Yes I like singing because it's feels me like I am free and my voice louder and I feel myself comfortable after depressing day when I depressed exhausted I just singing.

✓ Yes, I like singing because it makes me feel free, and my voice is louder, and I feel comfortable after a depressing day when I am depressed and exhausted; I just sing.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'feels me' instead of 'makes me feel' (verb + -ing form issue). Also, 'I just singing' should be 'I just sing' to use the correct verb form. The sentence also lacks articles and proper conjunctions, but the main grammar issues relate to verb forms and usage.

× Yes, I learned but not professional.

✓ Yes, I have learned, but I am not professional.

The sentence uses simple past 'learned' but the context suggests a present perfect tense is more appropriate to indicate experience. Also, 'not professional' lacks a verb; 'I am not professional' is correct.

× I just watch it YouTube videos, short videos with some bloggers with with million auditoriums and I just repeat it with them.

✓ I just watch YouTube videos, short videos with some bloggers who have millions of viewers, and I just repeat after them.

The phrase 'watch it YouTube videos' is incorrect; 'watch YouTube videos' is correct. 'With million auditoriums' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'who have millions of viewers'. Also, 'repeat it with them' should be 'repeat after them' to express imitation.

× Just for myself after exhausted day and it's just like a therapy and my soul feel, I don't know, like free.

✓ Just for myself after an exhausting day, and it's just like therapy, and my soul feels, I don't know, free.

'After exhausted day' should be 'after an exhausting day' because 'exhausting' is the correct adjective form here (verb + -ing form). Also, 'my soul feel' should be 'my soul feels' to agree with the singular subject.

× It's helps us.

✓ It helps us.

The auxiliary 'does' is not needed here; 'helps' is the correct third person singular form. 'It's helps' is incorrect because 'it's' is a contraction of 'it is' or 'it has', which cannot be followed by 'helps'.